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Luana Meets A Strange, Light Purple Cat. Chapter 2

 

09-18-14 12:59 PM
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Hello everyone. Here's the next chapter I hope that you like it! ^-^


Luana Meets A Strange, Light Purple Cat. Chapter 2


Luana stops in the middle of a long road and she quickly looks back.

Annoyed that made her to stop she said "That’s funny, I swear I could had sensed something following me...."

She shook her head and walked on.

Something behind a tall branch tree said "Good, she didn't see me..."

Who is this following Luana and what's the purpose? Luana finally gets back home she drops her school bag on a chair, and then she slumps down on the long chair, due to being tired.

She looks up to the ceiling and says "Its great that the exams are now over. My life has been pretty much the same for the past 16 years. I just sometimes wish something interesting can happen....
Well wishes like that don't come true. I need to go back to my job to earn money for a living."

"That’s not true!" said someone.

"Huh.....who said that?" asked Luana. Blinking her eyes as she said it.

"I did!"

Luana looks down on the floor. To see a light purple cat, wearing two cute bows. One on the back of her head, and the other in the front of her neck. Her tail swished lightly and she gave Luana a smile.

And Luana. Surprised to see a cat in her house asks the cat "Who the heck are you?"

"Well, as you can see. I am a cat!"

"Yes.....I can see that. I mean why are you in my house? Shoo go away! I don't care for pets!" said Luana.

And the cat said "How rude! Is that anyway to treat a friend?!"

And Luana said back "What friend? I don't have the time to make friends. I would rather be alone. And besides. I am a lone wolf girl, I don't need friends."

"How….can you be so cold?" said the cat.

"Well" said Luana "I have been on my own since I was a child at the age of 5. I don't have any parents or anything for that matter I don’t even know anything, that happened before my age of being 5 years. There's more. I've been miserable for my whole life anyway. Reason that this personality of mine is not *so nice*"

And the cat said "Well....What if I was to say that, I know about your past. And the answers that you seek?"

What will Luana now do? Believe the cat before her, is saying the truth or not? Look out for chapter 3!


Summon time~

legacyme3 :
Jordanv78 :
deg2000 :
Dragonlord Stephi :
A user of this :
TheReaper7290 :
hunter0409 :
Popeye116 :
Gamin'Gal:
Gamin'Gal:
Gamin'Gal:
Gamin'Gal:

You know what happens, if gamin doesn't get summoned....

Chapter 3 will be posted the next day. Thank you for reading. ^-^


Links to chpater 0 and chapter 1.

https://www.vizzed.com/boards/thread.php?id=79998

https://www.vizzed.com/boards/thread.php?id=80024
Hello everyone. Here's the next chapter I hope that you like it! ^-^


Luana Meets A Strange, Light Purple Cat. Chapter 2


Luana stops in the middle of a long road and she quickly looks back.

Annoyed that made her to stop she said "That’s funny, I swear I could had sensed something following me...."

She shook her head and walked on.

Something behind a tall branch tree said "Good, she didn't see me..."

Who is this following Luana and what's the purpose? Luana finally gets back home she drops her school bag on a chair, and then she slumps down on the long chair, due to being tired.

She looks up to the ceiling and says "Its great that the exams are now over. My life has been pretty much the same for the past 16 years. I just sometimes wish something interesting can happen....
Well wishes like that don't come true. I need to go back to my job to earn money for a living."

"That’s not true!" said someone.

"Huh.....who said that?" asked Luana. Blinking her eyes as she said it.

"I did!"

Luana looks down on the floor. To see a light purple cat, wearing two cute bows. One on the back of her head, and the other in the front of her neck. Her tail swished lightly and she gave Luana a smile.

And Luana. Surprised to see a cat in her house asks the cat "Who the heck are you?"

"Well, as you can see. I am a cat!"

"Yes.....I can see that. I mean why are you in my house? Shoo go away! I don't care for pets!" said Luana.

And the cat said "How rude! Is that anyway to treat a friend?!"

And Luana said back "What friend? I don't have the time to make friends. I would rather be alone. And besides. I am a lone wolf girl, I don't need friends."

"How….can you be so cold?" said the cat.

"Well" said Luana "I have been on my own since I was a child at the age of 5. I don't have any parents or anything for that matter I don’t even know anything, that happened before my age of being 5 years. There's more. I've been miserable for my whole life anyway. Reason that this personality of mine is not *so nice*"

And the cat said "Well....What if I was to say that, I know about your past. And the answers that you seek?"

What will Luana now do? Believe the cat before her, is saying the truth or not? Look out for chapter 3!


Summon time~

legacyme3 :
Jordanv78 :
deg2000 :
Dragonlord Stephi :
A user of this :
TheReaper7290 :
hunter0409 :
Popeye116 :
Gamin'Gal:
Gamin'Gal:
Gamin'Gal:
Gamin'Gal:

You know what happens, if gamin doesn't get summoned....

Chapter 3 will be posted the next day. Thank you for reading. ^-^


Links to chpater 0 and chapter 1.

https://www.vizzed.com/boards/thread.php?id=79998

https://www.vizzed.com/boards/thread.php?id=80024
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(edited by Eniitan on 09-18-14 01:30 PM)     Post Rating: 7   Liked By: hunter0409, Jordanv78, Maguc, Popeye116, Snu, Spicy, TheReaper7290,

09-18-14 01:02 PM
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Eniitan : Oh I can just imagine what the cat looks like and it's adorable. I could make a drawing of it. Another great chapter I was surprised to read that quickly though it just makes me anxious to read the next chapter



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Eniitan : Oh I can just imagine what the cat looks like and it's adorable. I could make a drawing of it. Another great chapter I was surprised to read that quickly though it just makes me anxious to read the next chapter



Gamin'Gal : work

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(edited by deg2000 on 09-18-14 01:03 PM)     Post Rating: 1   Liked By: Eniitan,

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Spoiler:
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But anyway, I've been silently stalking these stories, and I think you is doing pretty good, enii. CHASE UR DREEMS~ I just think you should keep going.
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Spoiler:
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But anyway, I've been silently stalking these stories, and I think you is doing pretty good, enii. CHASE UR DREEMS~ I just think you should keep going.
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Good job! This was a rather quick read, but it got me interested for the next chapter. I wonder how Luana is going to react to the first villain she comes across? 

When it comes to more grammatical points, I'd recommend you check your verb tenses; it switches from past to present without warning several times, making it feel a little awkward. I'd also check for run-on sentences. Sorry to be nit-picky.  
Good job! This was a rather quick read, but it got me interested for the next chapter. I wonder how Luana is going to react to the first villain she comes across? 

When it comes to more grammatical points, I'd recommend you check your verb tenses; it switches from past to present without warning several times, making it feel a little awkward. I'd also check for run-on sentences. Sorry to be nit-picky.  
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Once again, a really good chapter. I like how you put these things out, a little bit each chapter, but the chapters are (hopefully) consistent and nice to read, so it makes up for it, and overall really good.
Once again, a really good chapter. I like how you put these things out, a little bit each chapter, but the chapters are (hopefully) consistent and nice to read, so it makes up for it, and overall really good.
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