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Chapter 6 of Zed's story :D
09-11-13 04:54 PM
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Ok for all those who have not seen the other chapters here are the links . 1 and 2 : https://www.vizzed.com/boards/thread.php?id=65147 . Chapter 3 : https://www.vizzed.com/boards/thread.php?id=65171 . That has 2 parts so scroll down after you read the first part . Chapter 4 : https://www.vizzed.com/boards/thread.php?id=65171 . This also has two parts so scroll down after you read the first . Chapter 5 : https://www.vizzed.com/boards/thread.php?id=65171 . That also has two parts so yeah . Do what you know you should do . Here it is. Chapter 6 . Enjoy . Zed and his crew and ship after being semi ravaged by the waterfalls are now ropeless and there fore sail less. John : " Captain . Ship off the port bow " Zed - " Alright get ready . We are going to get us some rope " . The Unlucky Charm sails toward the ship in range and approach it looking like another passer by . Then at the right moment ..... Zed - " Now !!! " The crew and captain drop planks from their ship to the other and board the vessel . The ship and its crew turn out to be one of privateers and not pirates . They all point their guns at Zed and his crew . Zed - " Well then. Well this was unexpected " The captain was named Drake and was sent by England to bring spices and such from the Caribbean to England . Drake - " And what do we have here ? A group of lousy , filthy , backstabbing and caniving pirates " Zed - " Well um... yeah were pirates soooo ..... do you have any rope to spear ? " Drake - " Is this a joke ? You board my ship uninvited and ask me for rope ? ? " Zed - " Yes . Thats the idea " Drake - " Well I am sorry but I have no rope to spear right now . Wait ? Tall build. Blue shirt . Cunning attitude ? You're captain Zed aren't you ? " Zed - " I see my fame preceeds me " Drake - " Yes . You are wanted dead in England . " Zed - " Ohh. Well in that case I am not captain .... ummm he is * points at Luke * . " Drake - " They said that you would try to fool me but I am not blind. * Points at Zed* Cuff him and his crew . We bring them back in chains " Zed notices that the captain's shoes were untied . Zed - " Umm your shoe is on tied " Drake - " Ohh. I see it is * Bends down in front of Zed with his head pointing towards him * " Zed kicks the captain in his face and draws his sword out holding the captain hostage . Zed - " Now here are my orders . #1 Put away the guns. #2 . Give us your rope . And #3 . Get me some RUM . Now if you do not comply the captain The Unlucky Charm was now sailing like new again and Zed was in range of the Bog of the Beast . Mark - " Land hoe !!!! " The ship docked on an island that did not look too attractive for the sand was not white a or sand colored but rather a purplish blue color . Zed looked araound and could see but one person on the isle apart from him , his crew and his prisoner . Hermit - " Hello there" Zed - " Ahhh !!! . You spooked me there. Wait ? Weren't you the hermit that gave me the map ? Hermit - " Yes " Zed - " Then how did you get .... Nevermind " Mark - " Umm.. Captain ? Zed - " Yes Mark ? " Mark - " Doesn't the Lockness Monster live in water ?" Zed - " Yes I think so . " Mark - " Then how are we going to sail in the water body that it is in if the ship is here and the water body is on the island ? " Hermit - " It lives in a lake. A big one in the center of the Island . There is no way you can sail there . But there is another way to transport your ship to the Lake . Zed - " And how do you do that ? " Hermit - " First you have to take all the canons off the ship " The crew did as the hermit said and all the canons were now off the ship . Zed - " Now what ? " Hermit - " Aim the canons towards the ship ." Zed - OOOkkayy ? " All canons were aimed at the ship . Hermit - Take this pearl and put it in the center of the ship . When the pearl was placed at the correct location the hermit had one more thing to do . Hermit - " NOW FIRE !!! " . The sounds of canons could be heard firing froma mile away each ball hitting the ship at precise points dismantling the ship easily . Zed - " My ship ? What did you do to my ship ?!!!! ???? " Hermit - " Relax man. All will make sense when we get to the lake " Zed - " Alright bit if it does not work then I am looting you for every thing you have " Hermit - " Now take the main sail and pole , and some pieces of drift wood from the ship " The hermit's orders were carried out and Zed and his crew began there journey towards the Bog of the Beast . That was 6 . 7 Is coming up soon Here it is. Chapter 6 . Enjoy . Zed and his crew and ship after being semi ravaged by the waterfalls are now ropeless and there fore sail less. John : " Captain . Ship off the port bow " Zed - " Alright get ready . We are going to get us some rope " . The Unlucky Charm sails toward the ship in range and approach it looking like another passer by . Then at the right moment ..... Zed - " Now !!! " The crew and captain drop planks from their ship to the other and board the vessel . The ship and its crew turn out to be one of privateers and not pirates . They all point their guns at Zed and his crew . Zed - " Well then. Well this was unexpected " The captain was named Drake and was sent by England to bring spices and such from the Caribbean to England . Drake - " And what do we have here ? A group of lousy , filthy , backstabbing and caniving pirates " Zed - " Well um... yeah were pirates soooo ..... do you have any rope to spear ? " Drake - " Is this a joke ? You board my ship uninvited and ask me for rope ? ? " Zed - " Yes . Thats the idea " Drake - " Well I am sorry but I have no rope to spear right now . Wait ? Tall build. Blue shirt . Cunning attitude ? You're captain Zed aren't you ? " Zed - " I see my fame preceeds me " Drake - " Yes . You are wanted dead in England . " Zed - " Ohh. Well in that case I am not captain .... ummm he is * points at Luke * . " Drake - " They said that you would try to fool me but I am not blind. * Points at Zed* Cuff him and his crew . We bring them back in chains " Zed notices that the captain's shoes were untied . Zed - " Umm your shoe is on tied " Drake - " Ohh. I see it is * Bends down in front of Zed with his head pointing towards him * " Zed kicks the captain in his face and draws his sword out holding the captain hostage . Zed - " Now here are my orders . #1 Put away the guns. #2 . Give us your rope . And #3 . Get me some RUM . Now if you do not comply the captain The Unlucky Charm was now sailing like new again and Zed was in range of the Bog of the Beast . Mark - " Land hoe !!!! " The ship docked on an island that did not look too attractive for the sand was not white a or sand colored but rather a purplish blue color . Zed looked araound and could see but one person on the isle apart from him , his crew and his prisoner . Hermit - " Hello there" Zed - " Ahhh !!! . You spooked me there. Wait ? Weren't you the hermit that gave me the map ? Hermit - " Yes " Zed - " Then how did you get .... Nevermind " Mark - " Umm.. Captain ? Zed - " Yes Mark ? " Mark - " Doesn't the Lockness Monster live in water ?" Zed - " Yes I think so . " Mark - " Then how are we going to sail in the water body that it is in if the ship is here and the water body is on the island ? " Hermit - " It lives in a lake. A big one in the center of the Island . There is no way you can sail there . But there is another way to transport your ship to the Lake . Zed - " And how do you do that ? " Hermit - " First you have to take all the canons off the ship " The crew did as the hermit said and all the canons were now off the ship . Zed - " Now what ? " Hermit - " Aim the canons towards the ship ." Zed - OOOkkayy ? " All canons were aimed at the ship . Hermit - Take this pearl and put it in the center of the ship . When the pearl was placed at the correct location the hermit had one more thing to do . Hermit - " NOW FIRE !!! " . The sounds of canons could be heard firing froma mile away each ball hitting the ship at precise points dismantling the ship easily . Zed - " My ship ? What did you do to my ship ?!!!! ???? " Hermit - " Relax man. All will make sense when we get to the lake " Zed - " Alright bit if it does not work then I am looting you for every thing you have " Hermit - " Now take the main sail and pole , and some pieces of drift wood from the ship " The hermit's orders were carried out and Zed and his crew began there journey towards the Bog of the Beast . That was 6 . 7 Is coming up soon |
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Very nice zed will there be a cracken in one chapter? Very nice zed will there be a cracken in one chapter? |
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nzip : No there will be no Kraken . But I put a larger bear like creature and there will be the Lockness Monster in another. There were also some sharks in one. Maybe I can put some more sharks in my other one |
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If you are open to suggestions, maybe you can add a new character - a rival with enormous pride and a huge ego. He/she doesn't work for the good or bad side, but may be steered to work for one in a certain situation if his/her pride may be at stake. He/she is constantly a thorn in Zed's side. Anyways, your story is working out fantastic, so there's no need for new additions. Just a suggestion, that's all. Keep up the good work! Anyways, your story is working out fantastic, so there's no need for new additions. Just a suggestion, that's all. Keep up the good work! |
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Sidewinder : In the real POTC That person would be Barbosa. And I was thinking that person in this series could be Captain Roger . I think it was in his intro but if it wasn't then I am sorry for that. What do you think this character would look like. Name ? And does he have a crew . i specified " He " |
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Mr. Zed : Well, the character should be for you to decide! But if you ask me, maybe he can be sort of like a "Sonic vs Knuckles" thing, where Sonic would be Zed and Knuckles would be the rival. So you may possibly have the rival stronger in a certain category than Zed, and maybe a short rambunctious guy. He does have a crew, a substantial amount, and two guys are his close "mates", one smart guy and one-not-so smart guy. His name is for you to decide, I really am not so creative as you would be for this story. If the rival is indeed Captain Roger, maybe this little guy can be some sort of sidekick to Roger. Well, the character should be for you to decide! But if you ask me, maybe he can be sort of like a "Sonic vs Knuckles" thing, where Sonic would be Zed and Knuckles would be the rival. So you may possibly have the rival stronger in a certain category than Zed, and maybe a short rambunctious guy. He does have a crew, a substantial amount, and two guys are his close "mates", one smart guy and one-not-so smart guy. His name is for you to decide, I really am not so creative as you would be for this story. If the rival is indeed Captain Roger, maybe this little guy can be some sort of sidekick to Roger. |
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Sidewinder : Well Adding a new character with sidekicks would have me making even more dialogues for the sidekicks and the character . So I think I am going to make him Roger's Ally . Not too much of a sidekick but he does work for Roger . Thanks for the ideas bro |
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Hilarious as usual! "He'll Also... "Oh, well, in that case, I am no the captain, he is." Nice historical reference with Drake. Makes it feel more real. "He'll Also... "Oh, well, in that case, I am no the captain, he is." Nice historical reference with Drake. Makes it feel more real. |
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