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There's A Light (part one)

 

11-23-13 11:43 AM
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(A cold night in a small town,a young man named Shawn is sitting on the edge of a bridge,below the bridge is a 50ft drop into ice cold water in the lake below,he is sitting thinking as a young woman named Mayim is walking by the bridge and sees him)

MAYIM : Hey,you ok there?

SHAWN : Oh,I am fine,just sitting here thinking about stuff

MAYIM: Doesn't seem like a good place to think,kinda dangerous

SHAWN: Well it's quiet,but really I am ok

MAYIM: Sorry,just when I see someone in a position that you are in,it always looks bad,just some concern,it's in my nature

SHAWN: Thanks for your concern,but I am just thinking about life,I'm not planning to jump off this or anything

(Shawn chuckles)

MAYIM: Aren't you cold sitting there? And it's not nice around this area,all kinds of horrible people lurk about

SHAWN: Trust me,I am ok,been sitting here for 3 hours and not one person has came by until now

MAYIM: You could sit somewhere safer and think is all I am saying

SHAWN: Maybe I will move on eventually,it's good here

(Shawn looks out towards the trees he sees in the distance and then he looks up at the starry sky)

SHAWN: Peaceful too

MAYIM: You come here a lot to think?

SHAWN: Nope,just tonight,a lot of bad stuff been going on

MAYIM: Oh,I am sorry to hear that,I hope you are ok soon

SHAWN: I will be,I think

MAYIM: Well,I am Mayim by the way

SHAWN: That's a pretty name,quite unique too

MAYIM : What's yours?

SHAWN: Shawn,which is not so unique

(Mayim laughs softly)

MAYIM: Well Shawn,do you want to join me for coffee? I know a nice place,can think in there

SHAWN: That's nice of you,sure,I guess I have been out here long enough

MAYIM: You could maybe talk to me about what's been going on with your life

SHAWN: Sure,finally someone is caring

(Shawn smiles and gets off from the edge of the bridge and joins Mayim on the path next to the bridge,they both walk on together as the song "Sympathetic Noose" by Black Rebel Motorcycle Club ends this chapter)

END OF PART ONE
(A cold night in a small town,a young man named Shawn is sitting on the edge of a bridge,below the bridge is a 50ft drop into ice cold water in the lake below,he is sitting thinking as a young woman named Mayim is walking by the bridge and sees him)

MAYIM : Hey,you ok there?

SHAWN : Oh,I am fine,just sitting here thinking about stuff

MAYIM: Doesn't seem like a good place to think,kinda dangerous

SHAWN: Well it's quiet,but really I am ok

MAYIM: Sorry,just when I see someone in a position that you are in,it always looks bad,just some concern,it's in my nature

SHAWN: Thanks for your concern,but I am just thinking about life,I'm not planning to jump off this or anything

(Shawn chuckles)

MAYIM: Aren't you cold sitting there? And it's not nice around this area,all kinds of horrible people lurk about

SHAWN: Trust me,I am ok,been sitting here for 3 hours and not one person has came by until now

MAYIM: You could sit somewhere safer and think is all I am saying

SHAWN: Maybe I will move on eventually,it's good here

(Shawn looks out towards the trees he sees in the distance and then he looks up at the starry sky)

SHAWN: Peaceful too

MAYIM: You come here a lot to think?

SHAWN: Nope,just tonight,a lot of bad stuff been going on

MAYIM: Oh,I am sorry to hear that,I hope you are ok soon

SHAWN: I will be,I think

MAYIM: Well,I am Mayim by the way

SHAWN: That's a pretty name,quite unique too

MAYIM : What's yours?

SHAWN: Shawn,which is not so unique

(Mayim laughs softly)

MAYIM: Well Shawn,do you want to join me for coffee? I know a nice place,can think in there

SHAWN: That's nice of you,sure,I guess I have been out here long enough

MAYIM: You could maybe talk to me about what's been going on with your life

SHAWN: Sure,finally someone is caring

(Shawn smiles and gets off from the edge of the bridge and joins Mayim on the path next to the bridge,they both walk on together as the song "Sympathetic Noose" by Black Rebel Motorcycle Club ends this chapter)

END OF PART ONE
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11-24-13 07:36 AM
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What a nice short story you have here. Many people have their own styles, of writing a story and you have this one. I enjoyed it, I will be waiting for part 2 to come up soon. ^-^
What a nice short story you have here. Many people have their own styles, of writing a story and you have this one. I enjoyed it, I will be waiting for part 2 to come up soon. ^-^
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11-30-13 12:11 AM
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sonicbros : This is a very nice little play. It's short, but it has some very interesting, distinct characters, and significant impact in it. Awesome job!
sonicbros : This is a very nice little play. It's short, but it has some very interesting, distinct characters, and significant impact in it. Awesome job!
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