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03-14-13 01:39 AM
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So I'm going to be posting my poems on here that I write. I'm not sure if they are good or not so I was wondering if you guys can let me know. Also if you like what you read and you want me to write a poem for you I will be glad to do that. It will only be probably 1000 Viz. Maybe less. I might even do a couple for free depending on how I feel. Just message me and I will write it. Well here it is. It's called save your tears.

Save your tears for the day when the pain is far behind;
On your feet. Come with me. We are soldiers. Stand or die.
Save your fears. Take your place. Save them for the judgement day.
Fast and free. Follow me. Time to make a sacrifice.

Look around you. Tell me. What do you see?
The blood. The tears. The destruction that is laid in front of me.
This suffering. The fears. The rubble from buildings that use to be.
The corruption of the world is coming unto thee.

Save your tears for the day when the pain is far behind.
On your feet. Come with me. We are soldiers. Stand or die.
Save your fears. Take your place. Save them for the judgement day.
Fast and free. Follow me. Time to make a sacrifice.

Stand up soldier! Suppress that thought.
Lift up your arms and never get them caught.
Destroy your enemy and watch them rot.
The freedom of your family is for who have fought.

Thank you very much and I look forward to hearing from everybody.


Thank you very much and have a blessed day
So I'm going to be posting my poems on here that I write. I'm not sure if they are good or not so I was wondering if you guys can let me know. Also if you like what you read and you want me to write a poem for you I will be glad to do that. It will only be probably 1000 Viz. Maybe less. I might even do a couple for free depending on how I feel. Just message me and I will write it. Well here it is. It's called save your tears.

Save your tears for the day when the pain is far behind;
On your feet. Come with me. We are soldiers. Stand or die.
Save your fears. Take your place. Save them for the judgement day.
Fast and free. Follow me. Time to make a sacrifice.

Look around you. Tell me. What do you see?
The blood. The tears. The destruction that is laid in front of me.
This suffering. The fears. The rubble from buildings that use to be.
The corruption of the world is coming unto thee.

Save your tears for the day when the pain is far behind.
On your feet. Come with me. We are soldiers. Stand or die.
Save your fears. Take your place. Save them for the judgement day.
Fast and free. Follow me. Time to make a sacrifice.

Stand up soldier! Suppress that thought.
Lift up your arms and never get them caught.
Destroy your enemy and watch them rot.
The freedom of your family is for who have fought.

Thank you very much and I look forward to hearing from everybody.


Thank you very much and have a blessed day
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03-14-13 01:52 AM
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same font as earthwarrior.

Your poem is better than I expected. and I like that it had a story that you followed, instead of randomly rhyming.

I would like to see you branch out into short stories. Maybe you can become a very good writer one day. Keep writing, I say. I can clearly see that you have something here.
same font as earthwarrior.

Your poem is better than I expected. and I like that it had a story that you followed, instead of randomly rhyming.

I would like to see you branch out into short stories. Maybe you can become a very good writer one day. Keep writing, I say. I can clearly see that you have something here.
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03-14-13 01:58 AM
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bobq : Well I've always had a thought about writing a book about a zombie apocalypse but I have no idea how to start it or how to publish it when it's done. I'm really glad someone other then my parents think I'm good at poetry. I'm gonna post more of them when they are finished. I'm really quick when it comes to writing poems. I'm usually finished with one within 30 minutes or so.


Thank you very much and have a blessed day
bobq : Well I've always had a thought about writing a book about a zombie apocalypse but I have no idea how to start it or how to publish it when it's done. I'm really glad someone other then my parents think I'm good at poetry. I'm gonna post more of them when they are finished. I'm really quick when it comes to writing poems. I'm usually finished with one within 30 minutes or so.


Thank you very much and have a blessed day
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Very good. Thank you for the link to this. I enjoyed reading it. You definitely are a gifted writer.
Very good. Thank you for the link to this. I enjoyed reading it. You definitely are a gifted writer.
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03-14-13 12:24 PM
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Eirinn : Thank you very much All of this positive feedback is making my face turn red lol. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I also just posted another one not even a minute ago. Here is the link for that one: https://www.vizzed.com/boards/thread.php?id=55666 Also I was wondering if you would like to see more of my work posted. I'll do it if the people want to read them. I was also wondering if you could share my poems with other vizzed members. I want to be well known if possible.


Thank you very much and have a blessed day
Eirinn : Thank you very much All of this positive feedback is making my face turn red lol. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I also just posted another one not even a minute ago. Here is the link for that one: https://www.vizzed.com/boards/thread.php?id=55666 Also I was wondering if you would like to see more of my work posted. I'll do it if the people want to read them. I was also wondering if you could share my poems with other vizzed members. I want to be well known if possible.


Thank you very much and have a blessed day
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03-14-13 12:43 PM
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Yes, I'd love to see more of your work posted here. And I'll gladly share them.
Yes, I'd love to see more of your work posted here. And I'll gladly share them.
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03-14-13 12:56 PM
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Eirinn : Thank you very much I owe you one. And I'll make sure I keep posting more work. Speaking of more poems I just posted my first poem I ever wrote. I don't know if you would be interested or not but here is the link: https://www.vizzed.com/boards/thread.php?id=55669
I hope you enjoy this one as well  


Thank you very much and have a blessed day
Eirinn : Thank you very much I owe you one. And I'll make sure I keep posting more work. Speaking of more poems I just posted my first poem I ever wrote. I don't know if you would be interested or not but here is the link: https://www.vizzed.com/boards/thread.php?id=55669
I hope you enjoy this one as well  


Thank you very much and have a blessed day
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