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10-16-16 11:20 AM
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Three Words Saved Birthed Me.

There was nothing I could do, everything that I wish I didn't do was start following you.

 You lead me to the car, but then I thought that means death isn't far?

I wanted you to tell me those three words, the three words everyone kept telling me. Those three words seared inside my brain, telling me I couldn't accomplish a thing and just made me feel pain.

You kept your eyes straight ahead, at first I couldn't help but hope you were dead.

I was sad to realise that we came down to a stop, you exited the car and walked down towards the moorland.

I was growing sweaty and was quivering with fear, I swear to god that I wish that I would at least have a tear.

The words slapped me back to my senses, and a new found pain in my commences.

I slid into your warm seat and touch the key, there is no turning point and I can't just flee.

I quickly ignite the engine and it starts to scream, I hurry and pull the stick down to D.

We know what that is, DRIVE.

I slam the accelerate down, never making eye contact with myself or I'd frown.

I find you quickly surprised and waving at me, so I thought why not go down and say good day.

I tore through the ground and finally make contact with a pained face, it was strange to see you lace the windows with your body.

I could feel every single one of your bones and muscles smash and crackle underneath the tires, each time giving more and more pleasure soothing my mind.

you were gone and so was I.

Three words.

One.

Two.

Three.

K.

I.

L.

L.

Y.

O.

U.

R.

S.

E.

L.

F.

I never thought you would say that about me.

KILL YOUR SELF.

KILL.

YOUR.

SELF.

Oh well, I couldn't do it, as I thought the message was for you, now I wonder what shall I do....

This is a rough draft, and I would like some criticism : ) to help me finalise it, thank you! Like is my title good?
Three Words Saved Birthed Me.

There was nothing I could do, everything that I wish I didn't do was start following you.

 You lead me to the car, but then I thought that means death isn't far?

I wanted you to tell me those three words, the three words everyone kept telling me. Those three words seared inside my brain, telling me I couldn't accomplish a thing and just made me feel pain.

You kept your eyes straight ahead, at first I couldn't help but hope you were dead.

I was sad to realise that we came down to a stop, you exited the car and walked down towards the moorland.

I was growing sweaty and was quivering with fear, I swear to god that I wish that I would at least have a tear.

The words slapped me back to my senses, and a new found pain in my commences.

I slid into your warm seat and touch the key, there is no turning point and I can't just flee.

I quickly ignite the engine and it starts to scream, I hurry and pull the stick down to D.

We know what that is, DRIVE.

I slam the accelerate down, never making eye contact with myself or I'd frown.

I find you quickly surprised and waving at me, so I thought why not go down and say good day.

I tore through the ground and finally make contact with a pained face, it was strange to see you lace the windows with your body.

I could feel every single one of your bones and muscles smash and crackle underneath the tires, each time giving more and more pleasure soothing my mind.

you were gone and so was I.

Three words.

One.

Two.

Three.

K.

I.

L.

L.

Y.

O.

U.

R.

S.

E.

L.

F.

I never thought you would say that about me.

KILL YOUR SELF.

KILL.

YOUR.

SELF.

Oh well, I couldn't do it, as I thought the message was for you, now I wonder what shall I do....

This is a rough draft, and I would like some criticism : ) to help me finalise it, thank you! Like is my title good?
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(edited by deggle on 10-16-16 11:20 AM)     Post Rating: 4   Liked By: Momo Aria, RDay13, sonicthehedgehog57, Uzar,

10-17-16 08:37 PM
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This is pretty great, Deg It hit me right in my feels.

You did a wonderful job, although not I need to find some happy things to look at...
This is pretty great, Deg It hit me right in my feels.

You did a wonderful job, although not I need to find some happy things to look at...
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