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My Imagination in stories - Chapter 1: The missing person

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Name: Jake
Gender: Male
Look: Black, short hair, white skin color, wearing a blue hoody and grey jeans
Age: 17
Comes from: USA
Crush: X
Likes: Doing homework when needed, to make more time for games
Dislikes: School

Name: Zoe
Gender: Female
Look: Black, long hair, white skin color, wearing a pink skirt and a black hoody
Age: 16
Comes from: USA
Crush: Jake
Likes: Jake's handwriting, making art of the nature
Dislikes: Bullying, insulting other people

Name: Jess
Gender: Female
Look: Black, really long hair, black skin color, wearing a cap, a green tied shirt and blue jeans
Age: 17
Comes from: USA
Crush: Mike
Likes: Staying cool with her friends, and playing tennis.
Dislikes: Eating much, as she wants to keep her body healthy. Hates it to be angry, as she has psychical problems with anger.

Name: Philip
Gender: Male
Look: Black, slightly short hair (which is dyed red), tinted skin color, wearing an army t-shirt and pants with army print.
Age: 18
Comes from: France
Crush: Jess
Likes: The USA army, and Jess' brave feelings for everything she does.
Dislikes: His father and school.

Name: Mike
Gender: Male
Look: Blonde, long hair, white skin color, wearing a yellow hoody and grey pants, with a lot of chains on it.
Age: 16
Comes from: USA
Crush: Jess
Likes: Death Metal music, and being alone.
Dislikes: Being caught when doing something bad.

Name: Rachel
Gender: Female
Look: Blonde, really long hair, white skin color, wearing a sleeveless shirt in pink, a brown skirt and leather boots. Also has a huge ribbon in her hair.
Age: 18
Comes from: USA
Crush: X
Likes: Playing songs and making covers on her guitar secretly. In public, she makes jokes about everything. She likes being with her brother Mike as well.
Dislikes: Helping her handicapped mother constantly, so that she has no time for fun things to do.

Name: Frank Hudson (Mr. Hudson)
Gender: Male
Look: Grey, slightly short hair, white skin color, wearing a spencer, with green pants. Also, he's a bit on the old side.
Age: 57 (told you he is a bit on the old side!)
Comes from: USA
Crush: No one at school.
Likes: Listening to music from early 90's.
Dislikes: having to slap another student again. He hates that.

Name: Kelly McKinsey (Mrs. McKinsey)
Gender: Female
Look: Brown, really long hair, brown skin color, wearing a pink, sleeveless shirt with heartprint on it and wearing blue jeans, with a few chains on it.
Age: 23
Comes from: USA
Crush: No one at school
Likes: Helping out Mr Hudson's students when they're in trouble. Her best friend on school is Zoe.
Dislikes: Students who think they're cool if they throw a paper plane towards the teacher.

Note: None of these characters are in an 'important - not important' order, so the main character is hard to see here.

"There was the average nerd, there was the handsome basketball player, there was the cool, rebellious girl who always follows the latest trends... But there was no one who was like me: A person who doesn't belong in these catagories. And my friends... Some of them think the way as i do."

Chapter 1: The missing person.

Zoe was laying down on a bench, somewhere on the schoolyard. She had a portrait of a tree in her bag, as well as other stuff that was important to her.
Zoe: *sigh*
She was a bit silent today, as if something happened that made her sick. She was looking at her pink watch: 10 minutes left before the break is over. Then everyone had to go inside the school building, at their own class.
???: "Hey Zoe."
Someone scared Zoe by saying hello. She was still laying on the bench, and looked around. No one was there. She looked behind her, and there was indeed a person. It was Will, the friendly concierge who had to keep an eye on most students if all teachers had their lunchtime. Zoe went up.
Will: "Is something wrong?"
Zoe: "Oh, it's nothing... Thanks, Mr. Jackson."
Will: "Shall i leave you alone?"
Zoe: "Yes, please..."
Will: "If you need to talk, i'm at the main entrance."
Will walked away from the bench, walking towards two doors, which were together the main entrance. Will was 45, but still enjoying his job. He likes interacting with so many people.
Zoe: *sigh*
5 minutes left before the break is over. She was looking at Jake, who was talking with Mike and Rachel. Jake was suddenly laughing really hard, and Mike pointed at Zoe. Jake waved, and Zoe waved back with a smile. Jake was talking a bit, pointing at Zoe, and then he walked towards her.
Zoe: "Wait... is he..."
Jake: "Hey, Zoe!"
Zoe: "Hi..."
Jake: "What's wrong?"
Zoe: "Oh... well... my... dog died two days ago..."
Jake was sitting next to her.
Jake: "That's horrible... But... two days ago was monday and you seemed to be okay on tuesday."
Zoe: "I know, but it hit me now..."
Jake layed an arm over Zoe.
Jake: "If you wanna talk, i am with Mike and Rachel."
Zoe: "Ok..."
Jake was walking away, towards Mike and Rachel.
2 minutes left. Zoe was happy that Jake left her alone, but also a bit sad. Zoe was taking a look at her painting of the tree. It was a pretty detailed oak tree, with two people in front of it: A boy and a girl, holding their hands.
Beeeeeeeeeep!
The break was over, and Zoe had to go inside. She was walking towards the door, hearing Mike and Jake talking about something.
Jake: "You sure he is in there the whole time?"
Mike: "Trust me, a trustworthy friend of mine saw him sitting there in the basement. And meanwhile, that same person is missing and wanted by the police!"
Zoe: "Excuse me, Mike. What are you guys talking about?"
Mike: "About a missing person in this school. He was there the whole time! Since you were born! Since... Will was born!"
Jake: "Mike, that's too much... He can't be a grown up and also be there for 45 years..."
Zoe: "Why can't we take a look at it?"
Jake: "Good idea, then we'll be caught for breaking in and then we're in jail. I'd say, we should do so!"
Zoe: "Alright, then...... See you, Jake!"
Mr. Hudson: "Alright, everyone... Take a seat."
Everyone was talking with each other, and some of them were sitting down on their chair.
Mr. Hudson went up.
Mr. Hudson: "EVERYONE, TAKE A SEAT OR YOU'LL BE HERE FOR THE NEXT 6 HOURS, WRITING "I MUST NOT TALK WHILE THE TEACHER IS GIVING LESSONS!"!!
Everyone was taking a seat.
Mr. Hudson: "Good..."
He was walking around, in front of the chalkboard.
Mr. Hudson was getting a knife out of his pocket.
Mr. Hudson: "Do you guys know who had this knife, and didn't follow the rules?"
Someone put his hand up. It was Martin, the boy who always told the teacher what was happening. Kind of the teacher's pet.
Martin: "I know who did it."
Mr. Hudson was pointing at Martin.
Mr. Hudson: "Who?"
Everyone was looking at Martin.
Martin: "I saw Jerry walking with it this morning."
Jerry: "What. I..."
Mr. Hudson: "Silence, Jerry. I should call your parents one day, they will surely like this... Not..."
Jerry: "Sir, i didn't..."
Mr Hudson: "You didn't follow the rules, i know..."
Zoe: "Sir, he didn't do it."
Mr. Hudson: "What? You want to stay here after school too?"
Zoe: "No, but Jerry has a knife, but not that one."
Mr. Hudson was looking at the knife, which wasn't Jerry's knife at all. Jerry had a red one, this one was dark red.
Mr. Hudson: "Alright, never mi-..."
Kelly was dashing through the door, making her falling to the ground.
Everyone was laughing at Kelly.
Kelly was standing up.
Kelly: "Sorry for that i'm late... The traffic was stuck."
Mr. Hudson: "Kelly, i know you're late. I know the traffic was stuck. But please... Don't dash through that door again."
Kelly: "Sorry, Mr Hudson..."
Kelly was walking to a chair and a table all the way at the other side of the classroom.
Mr Hudson: "All right, let's start the lessons now. Open up your English books on page..."

3 hours later...

BEEEEEEEEEP!!
The schoolbell told the students it was time. Time to go home and celebrate their free time for the rest of the day. Zoe was packing her stuff, but it's so stuffed that everything on the table fell on the ground.
Mr. Hudson: "Ugh, Zoe. Hurry up, please."
Zoe: "I will, sir..."
Kelly was about to leave but went to Zoe and was helping her a bit. Zoe's bag was stuffed quickly.
Zoe: "Thanks, Kelly."
Kelly: "You're welcome!"
Mr. Hudson: "Girls, please go. I want to close this classroom."
Zoe and Kelly were going out of the school, going to their home.

12 minutes later, on the way towards home...

Zoe was walking towards home and saw a man running away. She knew that man: It was a strange weirdo named Harold. Harold had no kids and no wife, and had almost no money.
Zoe: "Huh?"
She suddenly saw a shoe flying out of a window. Zoe decided to take a look at the house where it came from. She was standing behind a tree, to look at the house. It was a small house connected with 19 other houses. Zoe heard a little screaming, but then...
Zoe: *gasp*
She saw blood splatting on the window she was looking through. And the white curtains that were hanging there behind the window were suddenly red.
Zoe: "Aaaaaaah!!"
She was looking for her phone, to call the police. She found it finally, but didn't notice the white-red curtains were gone. Someone saw her.
Zoe was typing in her phone the 911 alarm line.
Someone was answering the phone call.
Person: "911 emergency line, how can i help you?"
Zoe: "Someone got killed and i am the witness!!"
Person: "Alright, stay calm. Do you know who it is?"
Zoe: "No, but i'm at Treehouse Street number..."
A hand was covering Zoe's mouth. It took Zoe towards the person. She looked up and could see who it was: It was that strange Harold. Zoe's eyes went bigger as she saw the grinning of Harold's mouth.
Person on the phone: "Alright, we'll send... Miss? Are you there?"
Harold was picking up the phone.
Harold: "You'll never save her."
Zoe: "MMMMMMPHH!!"
Harold hang up the phone call, grabbed a plank and knocked Zoe out. He dragged her inside his house.

Meanwhile...

Mike: "You sure we can't be caught?"
Rachel: "Hey, listen! YOU were about to go here, it was YOUR idea to go here."
Jake: "Guys, we should return now. It's getting late and mom is probably worried sick about me."
Mike: "You're too soft, Jake. That's why you shall never get a girlfriend."
Jake: "Do you have a girlfriend, then?"
Mike: "Uh, no... But..."
Jake: "Then shut up."
The three were at the school building, at the same time when Zoe got kidnapped. They were breaking in to see if there's indeed a missing person in the basement.
Rachel: "Guys! The basement door is..."
Rachel tried to open the basement door, but it's locked.
Mike: "Locked. Darn it all!"
Jake: "Well, then we should go home. See you guys tomorrow."
Jake was looking through a really small window, and saw Harold coming towards the school building.
Jake: "Guys, someone's coming... Huh?!"
He saw that Harold was taking a suitcase with him, and it was quite stuffed.
Mike: "If there's someone coming, we should hide!"
The three were hiding behind a corner in the schoolbuilding, having sight over the main entrance that was opened by Harold. Harold was getting some keys from his pocket and opened the basement door. He went inside the basement with the suitcase with him.
Jake: "Come on! We have to follow him!"
Mike and Rachel went up and were going downstairs, to the basement. Jake was closely behind them. When they were downstairs in the basement, they saw no one. Except a suitcase, a couple of old things and... an arm?
Rachel: "Guys... There's someone laying there all the time..."
Mike: "Then that body is fresh, because it would've been rotten away if it wasn't."
Jake: "Shh... I hear footsteps..."
They saw a wooden crate and ran towards it, hiding for Harold who came to inspect the place. Harold stopped in front of the crate. He was looking in the air, looking around.
Harold: "Grr... I smell people..."
Jake was thinking: "Oh no... He discovered us..."
The three were very, very nervous and were thinking they would die if they did something.
Harold: "Grr... Stupid policemen... I shall learn them a lesson."
He grabbed a gun out of his pocket and ran upstairs. The door was closed. The three were happy enough that Harold didn't caught them. They sighed but were still hiding behind the wooden crate.
Jake went up and was looking around. He saw the keys laying on the ground, next to the suitcase.
Jake went to the suitcase and grabbed the keys. But then...
???: "...mmm..."
Jake: "Huh?"
It came from the suitcase, laying there on the ground. Jake opened it, looking at Mike and Rachel who said "No".
Mike went up and grabbed the keys and ran upstairs. He locked the door. Then he went downstairs again to look at Jake. He was sitting next to the suitcase, then he finally opened it.
???: "Hmm....Mmph..."
Jake: "WHAT!?"
He saw Zoe laying in the suitcase. She was fine, just had a bump on her head.
Jake: "Guys, take a look at this."
Mike and Rachel were running towards Jake, who was shocked to see Zoe in a suitcase. She woke up.
Zoe: "H-huh..."
Jake: "Zoe!"
Zoe: "Wh-where am i..."
Mike: "It appears you are in the suitcase of a kidnapper... My god..."
Zoe: "Wha..."
She felt dizzy. Very dizzy.
Jake was staring at her while she was looking around a bit and was looking at the surroundings. Suddenly, she took a look at some cartboard boxes and saw something very uncomfortable. She even screamed.
Zoe: "Aaaaaahh!!"
Jake: "What?! What is it!?"
Jake turned to the same direction as Zoe did and saw the same thing: A dead person.
Jake: "Guys! That dead person! It was there all the time!"
Mike went up with Rachel and was looking, but didn't saw the arm. Mike went towards the suitcase, and saw the body too.
Mike: "My god..."
The body was moved. That's why the three didn't see the body's arm. Jake recognized the body: It was his old schoolmate Xavier, so it was a boy. Xavier was actually 'moving to another school', but now it is clear where he truly is: In heaven.
Rachel: "That's Xavier!"
Zoe: "J-jake... I'm..."
KLANK!!!
The four were shocked when they heard a loud noise. It sounded like... The basement door was being forced.
Jake: "*whispers* Guys... I think Harold is back..."
They saw a shade coming down, and it wasn't Harold. It was a policeman who was sent by the same person Zoe called with the 911 emergency line.
Policeman: "Greetings. I was told there was a murder commited somewhere here?"
Zoe: "Y-yes. B-but it's not just one..."
She pointed at the dead body. The policeman took a look at the body.
Policeman: "Call me Ted. Well, i can asure you kids he's dead. That Harold got away with murder because he escaped when he caught him."
Mike: "Oh god."
Policeman: "But don't worry, he have to get past us first in order to get you kids, am i right? I'll give you kids a ride home..."

20 minutes later, Zoe was sitting home on the couch with a cup of coffee in her hands. She told the whole story to her mom and 5 year younger brother, Timmy.
Zoe: "And that's the whole story..."
Mom: "I didn't knew there was a creep like that roaming in our streets... And you're sure you didn't got hurt?"
Zoe: "Well, he knocked me out. I have a bump on my head."
Mom: "Let me see..."
Mom was looking at Zoe's bump.
Mom: "Oh dear, that's indeed a big one. Call i get you some ice for it?"
Zoe: "No thank you, it's fine."
Timmy: "When i get older, i want to be a policeman myself too!"
Zoe: "Well, i won't stop you with that."
Timmy: "Do you join me then, sis? Then we're unstoppable!"
Zoe: "Oh... Eh... I'll see if it's my dream later, okay?"

The following day...

Zoe went to school and saw Jess sitting on a bench, holding a tiny ball of rubber. She kept squeezing it. She looked very angry, as if something happened. Zoe decided to talk to her.
Zoe: "Hey, Jess."
Jess: "What do you want..."
Zoe: "Well, i want to help you. What happened?"
Jess: "Ugh, that stupid Eric decided to write my name with Mike's name on the wall with a permanent marker... And the teachers blamed me..."
Jess was digging in her schoolbag.
Zoe: "And are you gonna say sorry to the teachers?"
Jess: "Hey! Listen! I didn't do it, Eric did! So i'm gonna learn him a lesson he never had before... Tonight..."
Zoe: "Wait... You aren't...gonna..."
Jess: "Why not? I know where he lives, so..."
Zoe: "But... 'Beating the (****) out of him' isn't working, Jess!"
Jess was getting something out of her bag, it looked sharp.
Jess: "I didn't said i was gonna do that."
She grinned. Zoe was staring as if she got scared of something. Something inside Jess isn't right...

To be continued...

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Excellent story man. Keep up the good work dude. This took forever to read lol.

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It is a very great story though not every person that was mentioned in the story got a character profile which I guess is good for mystery though it would have been better to know everyone that was going to be in the story except for the killers

knowing info aboutz Jerry, Martian, and Eric would have been useful to us when trying to connect with them in the story no matter how brief their part in the story is ... and if Jess is crazy then Mike better watch his back since they have a crush for each other and if he does something she doesn't like he might be joining Eric in what ever fate she has planned for him

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Jygin : Well, i only listed the people who are surely gonna return in further stories. Actually, their information. Jerry, Martin and Eric were just schoolmates that are not gonna return much.

Also, Jess seems to be 'the cool girl', but if she's mad...

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Updated the 'Dislike' section of Jess, as the ending has something to do with her.

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