This story Is about Adam Baker,Adam 2,Enzo Matrix,Party Boy,Perfect,Sensitive,Winston and, Zexyzec went to this system called Mainframe. They really like the place and, they fly with their Zip-board to Dot's diner. They got to meet Dot Matrix,Bob,Mouse,AndrAIa,Phong and, Frisket. they went to battle Megabyte In silcon tor. They destory Megabyte and Winston say Winston: this is a good battle i am glad we work to togeter and Adam 2 say Adam 2: that right Winston. They all with back to their real world and they had another party. Party Boy was glad that they all were his friend and he love them like brothers. They really enjoy their self. Party Boy was saying that he enjoy hanging out his brother and everyone nod their heads to agree with Party Boy and they all told Party Boy that they love him like a brother too. They was having fun dancing and, drinking can of pop and, playing videogames and they really love going on an adventure together.


Adam Baker,Adam 2,Enzo Matrix,Party Boy,Perfect,Sensitive,Winston and, Zexyzec are brothers for life


Here the Quotes Adam Baker,Adam 2,Enzo Matrix,Party Boy,Perfect,Sensitive,Winston and, Zexyzec say

Adam Baker: Wow that was good Adventure and, I love you guys And, you guys are my brother

Adam 2: I love you too Adam and I love you guy and you guys like brothers to me

Enzo Matrix : Adam 2 thanks and I really enjoy hanging out with you guys and, I love you Brothers

Party Boy: Enzo you are so cool and, Same goes with your cousin Zexyzec & I love you bros

Perfect: Enzo Party Boy Is right you are cool and, I love you guys and you are my brothers

Sensitive: This was fun you guys & I love you all like brother

Winston: This was so awesome & I love you guys and, you guys are my brothers

zexyzec : Winston I agree with you and, It was fun & I enjoyed hanging out with you guys and, I love you guys you all are my brothers

Hey, Enzo! Didn't read it yet, but I'll edit this post as soon as I do with my suggestions as stuff!

I only have one for the first sentence, and remember - there was no reason to make "Is" capital . Just say "is". You only capitalize a word when it's a name, or it's the first word in a sentence!

Also, put spaces after the comas, and the coma before the "and", not after! "Adam Baker,Adam 2,Enzo Matrix,Party Boy,Perfect,Sensitive,Winston and, Zexyzec" should be "Adam Baker, Adam 2, Enzo Matrix, Part Boy, Perfect, Sensitive, and Zexyzec" :3.

I know some people are saying they don't want to see any more stories of yours with Splitting Adam characters, but ignore them; it's your choice .

Anyway, maybe you could give details about the people they meet! Maybe they could meet them at different times. Maybe they met Dot Matrix and Bob first, but Mouse and the others later! Give details about them ! If Dot Matrix is nice, say he's nice! If he has a cool hairstyle, say he has a cool hairstyle! If he has no hair, say he has no hair XD!

By the way, it's good that you're making stories, but you don't have to make them too fast; taking your time is always better . Practice makes perfect, but make sure to take a break every now and then, and try to make more differences in your stories! Instead of everyone having fun drinking cans of pop like always, why isn't there a bad guy for a change, huh? See what I mean ?

Anyway, good job so far! I'll read the rest later!~

Enzo Matrix : When you post a story, please make sure that you must remove your layout. Like Kimmy said, make sure there are spaces after the coma. Ignore those who want you to stop from making them, I like them, and you should keep it up!

greenluigi : You're right about that