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Dragon ball Elniër chapter 3 new dangers

 

11-10-14 04:03 PM
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 Chapter 3 new dangers

2 months later, Earth

Elric stood surrounded by 5 gang criminals.

Now then move along or we will kill you a bandit said.

Elric just laughed at them.
 
A bandit started to shoot but Elric jumped backwards and punched a bandit knocking him out.

Elric then shot a few Ki blasts knocking 3 other bandits out.

The last bandit ran towards Elric with a knife.

Elric grabbed the knife and broke the bandits leg after which he flew off.
 
Once he got at capsule corp he saw that Gohan was there.

Elric flew towards Gohan. Hey Gohan what are you doing here Elric said.

There is going to be a party next week because it’s Krillins birthday then Gohan said.

Alright me and Yellow will come as well Elric said.

Thanks Elric that will mean a lot to Krillin Gohan said. Ok then until next week Gohan Elric said.

Alright then bye Gohan said and flew off.

Better to get it out of the way here than to hear Yellow beg for it Elric thought to himself.

Elric walked in Yellows room.

Hi Elric Yellow said.

Hey Yellow next week is Krillins birthday Elric said.

Oh what nice can we go please Yellow said.

Yeah I already told Gohan that we are coming so don’t worry about that little sis Elric said. O

h thank you thank you thank you Yellow said as she danced around in happiness.

Don’t mention it said Elric.

A week later.

Yellow come down we are going to be late Elric said.

Alright I’m coming Elric Yellow said.

Yellow came down and both flew towards krillins house.

Once on the party Yellow started to talk with the other as Elric watched the eating contest between Goku and Vegeta which Goku won.

It was late in the night as suddenly another guy came in.

witch one of you is a Elniër the guy said.

I-I’m an elniër Yellow said.
 
Then you must be Orange the guy said as he charged a Ki blast.

Elric kicked him in the face and screamed at him.

I am Orange come and get me Elric screamed as he flew off with the guy chasing him.

Elric stopped at a wasteland and turned around.
 
UNIVERSE RAIN Elric screamed as thousands of small light blue Ki blasts flew towards the guy who blocked it.

Alright then just who are you Elric asked.
 
My name is Potanto And I will kill you Orange the guy said.

I will eat you once I have killed you potato Elric said.

IT'S POTANTO Potanto yelled.

i don't care and the audience also doesn't care Elric said

DAMMIT ELRIC Vegeta screamed from the distance.

Potanto threw a Ki blast at Elric but Elric dodged it,
 
Elric used the afterimage. Potanto destroyed all fakes but then got punched by Elric followed up by another universe rain.

SUPER SUISHIO BLAST Potanto screamed.

EJL BEAM Elric screamed as well.

The 2 attacks combined making a huge explosion.

Potanto went aqua Akaian.

Potanto punched Elric rapidly and punched him to the ground.

The others came and saw it.

Elric you can do it Goku screamed.

Elric got up as his hair went yellow and his eyes went green.

SERIOUSLY CAN EVERYTHING TURN SSJ NOWADAYS, WHY NOT GET THE DRAGON BALLS AND WISH FOR EVERYTHING TO BE A goshdarn SSJ Vegeta screamed.

hey krillin let's go get the dragon balls Yamcha said.

sure thing, what about a ssj wish Krillin said.

I WAS KIDDING Vegeta yelled.

Elric punched Potanto backwards and did another universe rain.

Both fighters then did a punching fest with Potanto still having an advantage.
 
Elric flew upwards and used the ejl beam hitting Potanto full on.

Potanto appeared out of the smoke unharmed and kicked Elric and then did a Ki blast volley.

Elric barely got up and kicked Potanto in the chest.

WARRIOR BALL Elric screamed and a gigantic yellow ball flew towards Potanto and hit him.

Potanto came out of the smoke and kicked Elric again.
 
Elric fell down and tried to get up.

Potanto turned and looked at the others.

Yellow flew towards Elric but Potanto shot a Ki blast at her, blasting her against the ground.

Elric saw it and got really angry,

YELLOW Elric screamed as he turned ssj2.

Everyone looked shocked at Elric.

Elric punched Potanto in the chest and threw a warrior ball at Potanto.

Potanto got hid very hard and fell down.

Potanto got up,

SUPER SUISHIO BLAST Potanto screamed.

EJL BEAM Elric screamed.

The 2 attacks collided and the ejl beam overpowered Potanto’s attack.
 
Potanto got hit and was barely standing. 

Hmm maybe I should go to 85 percent Elric said.

What, am I that weak now Potanto said. 

Suddenly they both heard an unknown voice.

You are both way to weak for me the voice said.

Where are you, who are you Elric asked.

I don’t think you should worry about me now, you’ll have enough time for that once I’ve captured you 2 the voice said.

author - i hope you enjoyed this chapter and i also wish you a great day

imamonster
greenluigi
 Chapter 3 new dangers

2 months later, Earth

Elric stood surrounded by 5 gang criminals.

Now then move along or we will kill you a bandit said.

Elric just laughed at them.
 
A bandit started to shoot but Elric jumped backwards and punched a bandit knocking him out.

Elric then shot a few Ki blasts knocking 3 other bandits out.

The last bandit ran towards Elric with a knife.

Elric grabbed the knife and broke the bandits leg after which he flew off.
 
Once he got at capsule corp he saw that Gohan was there.

Elric flew towards Gohan. Hey Gohan what are you doing here Elric said.

There is going to be a party next week because it’s Krillins birthday then Gohan said.

Alright me and Yellow will come as well Elric said.

Thanks Elric that will mean a lot to Krillin Gohan said. Ok then until next week Gohan Elric said.

Alright then bye Gohan said and flew off.

Better to get it out of the way here than to hear Yellow beg for it Elric thought to himself.

Elric walked in Yellows room.

Hi Elric Yellow said.

Hey Yellow next week is Krillins birthday Elric said.

Oh what nice can we go please Yellow said.

Yeah I already told Gohan that we are coming so don’t worry about that little sis Elric said. O

h thank you thank you thank you Yellow said as she danced around in happiness.

Don’t mention it said Elric.

A week later.

Yellow come down we are going to be late Elric said.

Alright I’m coming Elric Yellow said.

Yellow came down and both flew towards krillins house.

Once on the party Yellow started to talk with the other as Elric watched the eating contest between Goku and Vegeta which Goku won.

It was late in the night as suddenly another guy came in.

witch one of you is a Elniër the guy said.

I-I’m an elniër Yellow said.
 
Then you must be Orange the guy said as he charged a Ki blast.

Elric kicked him in the face and screamed at him.

I am Orange come and get me Elric screamed as he flew off with the guy chasing him.

Elric stopped at a wasteland and turned around.
 
UNIVERSE RAIN Elric screamed as thousands of small light blue Ki blasts flew towards the guy who blocked it.

Alright then just who are you Elric asked.
 
My name is Potanto And I will kill you Orange the guy said.

I will eat you once I have killed you potato Elric said.

IT'S POTANTO Potanto yelled.

i don't care and the audience also doesn't care Elric said

DAMMIT ELRIC Vegeta screamed from the distance.

Potanto threw a Ki blast at Elric but Elric dodged it,
 
Elric used the afterimage. Potanto destroyed all fakes but then got punched by Elric followed up by another universe rain.

SUPER SUISHIO BLAST Potanto screamed.

EJL BEAM Elric screamed as well.

The 2 attacks combined making a huge explosion.

Potanto went aqua Akaian.

Potanto punched Elric rapidly and punched him to the ground.

The others came and saw it.

Elric you can do it Goku screamed.

Elric got up as his hair went yellow and his eyes went green.

SERIOUSLY CAN EVERYTHING TURN SSJ NOWADAYS, WHY NOT GET THE DRAGON BALLS AND WISH FOR EVERYTHING TO BE A goshdarn SSJ Vegeta screamed.

hey krillin let's go get the dragon balls Yamcha said.

sure thing, what about a ssj wish Krillin said.

I WAS KIDDING Vegeta yelled.

Elric punched Potanto backwards and did another universe rain.

Both fighters then did a punching fest with Potanto still having an advantage.
 
Elric flew upwards and used the ejl beam hitting Potanto full on.

Potanto appeared out of the smoke unharmed and kicked Elric and then did a Ki blast volley.

Elric barely got up and kicked Potanto in the chest.

WARRIOR BALL Elric screamed and a gigantic yellow ball flew towards Potanto and hit him.

Potanto came out of the smoke and kicked Elric again.
 
Elric fell down and tried to get up.

Potanto turned and looked at the others.

Yellow flew towards Elric but Potanto shot a Ki blast at her, blasting her against the ground.

Elric saw it and got really angry,

YELLOW Elric screamed as he turned ssj2.

Everyone looked shocked at Elric.

Elric punched Potanto in the chest and threw a warrior ball at Potanto.

Potanto got hid very hard and fell down.

Potanto got up,

SUPER SUISHIO BLAST Potanto screamed.

EJL BEAM Elric screamed.

The 2 attacks collided and the ejl beam overpowered Potanto’s attack.
 
Potanto got hit and was barely standing. 

Hmm maybe I should go to 85 percent Elric said.

What, am I that weak now Potanto said. 

Suddenly they both heard an unknown voice.

You are both way to weak for me the voice said.

Where are you, who are you Elric asked.

I don’t think you should worry about me now, you’ll have enough time for that once I’ve captured you 2 the voice said.

author - i hope you enjoyed this chapter and i also wish you a great day

imamonster
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 This is hands down the best chapter yet! My character is introduced! 

I loved it, good job.
 This is hands down the best chapter yet! My character is introduced! 

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imamonster : actually you where already introduced in chapter 2 but that was with 7 other characters. Also I am gonna make a movie-like special in the middle of chapter 3 and 4
imamonster : actually you where already introduced in chapter 2 but that was with 7 other characters. Also I am gonna make a movie-like special in the middle of chapter 3 and 4
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appelmoesFTW : I felt that this was a character introduction, different than what happened in chapter 2.
appelmoesFTW : I felt that this was a character introduction, different than what happened in chapter 2.
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imamonster : yeah that's true. i hope that Orange/Elric gets beaten up because he broke the fourth wall.
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