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Dragon ball Elniër chapter 1

 

11-03-14 04:31 PM
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 The last Elniër

 Chapter 1 the meeting

11 years later, earth


It was just a year after the defeat of buu. Goten and Goku were training.

Goten - KAMEHAMEHAA *fires the attack*.

Goku - *manages to block it* *kicks Goten*.

Chi-chi - Boys dinner.

Goku and Goten - *immediately go inside to eat*.

Gohan - *smiles* slow down Goten leave some for me.


Suddenly 2 big powers appeared on the planet.

Goku and his sons - *instantly looks south*. 

Goku - Chi-chi we need to go investigate.

All 3 - *flies off*.

All 3 - *sees Vegeta Trunks and Piccolo outside*. 

Goten - Hey guys.

Vegeta - Oh the clown and his spawns are here.

Goku - Vegeta don’t be like that said *tries to look sad*.

Piccolo - Let’s just ensure those powers aren’t dangerous.

Gohan - Ok Mr Piccolo.


Meanwhile a 15 year old kid in complete yellow clothing and a yellow scarf was looking from a hill at a town together with a 11 year old girl in a dress and leather shoes.

the boy - Were here Yellow. 

Yellow - Yeah this planet looks wonderful Orange I mean Elric.
 
Elric - Yeah sure whatever.

Yellow - Elric can I go into the town? 

Elric - No Yellow. 

Yellow - Please Elric. 

Elric - Yellow.

Yellow - Please. 

Elric - Ugh fine you get 4 hours.

Yellow - Thank you Elric.

Elric - Don’t mention it.

Yellow - (hopefully i can find some cool stuff.)

Elric - (Yellow we aren't thieves, we are gonna pay so you have to watch your money.)

Yellow - (Elric stop reading my mind.)

Elric - (too bad that you are to young to read my mind.)

Yellow - (i'm going, bye Elric)

Elric - *looks as Yellow walks towards the town*.

Elric *waits for 3½ hour*

the z fighters - *arrived*.

Elric - *looks at them feeling their power* (the 2 kids are too weak, the 3 grown ups are about my strength and the namekian is unbelievable strong.)

Elric - *glares at them* what is the problem namek?

Trunks - I will beat this 1 *rushes towards Elric*.

Elric - *dodges and spin kicked Trunks* *punches him in the stomach*.

Gohan - *rushes in and starts fighting with Elric*.

Yellow - *shows up*.

Vegeta - This 1 is mine *flies towards Yellow*.

Elric - *sees it and manages to stop Vegeta*. 

Elric - Yellow run, go find a safe place.
 
Gohan - *heard it and gets unsure*.  Is he really a threat dad? asked he seems to be nice.

Elric - You filthy saiyan Elric.

Everyone - *gets stunned by what Elric said* 

Gohan - but you are also a Saiyan.

Elric - *looks at Gohan like he is crazy* no I am a full Elniër.
 
Vegeta - *smirks* more like half ëlnier half saiyan.

Elric - *glares at him* and now to stop your evil ways.
 
Goku - Wait we are not evil, we wanted to check if you weren’t dangerous.

Elric - Then why did you guys attack me first.

Piccolo - It’s in Vegeta’s family.

Elric - So you guys let the prince of the worthless live but decide to kill a few elniërs? I don’t follow you guys.

Goku - Vegeta why didn’t you tell us about them?

Vegeta - Because their race doesn’t matter Kakarot.

Elric - *glares at Vegeta you worthless saiyan*.

Vegeta - *gets angry* what did you say lowlife scum.

Goku - Guys stop now.

Elric - Fine whatever you want, I am going to get my sis.

Elric - *flies off*.

Piccolo - Should we really trust him?

Gohan - Why not?

Piccolo - Because he has a high power and he hates Vegeta.

Gohan - ever met anyone from space that doesn't hate Vegeta or the saiyans?

Goku - Let’s just see how he is.

16 minutes later
 
Elric - *comes back with Yellow* Well then … this is my little sis Yellow and my name is Elric. 

Goku - Hi Elric and Yellow.


Yellow - H-hi everyone.

Goku - *introduced everyone to the 2 demi elniërs*.

Gohan - Sorry that we tried to kill you 2.

Yellow - Its okay.

Elric - (i swear she takes apologies to fast)

Goku - Hey let’s introduce you guys to the others. 

Yellow - Okay.

Elric and Vegeta - whatever *both glare at each other*. 

Everyone - *flies off towards capsule corp calling the others with their power*.

Once everyone was at capsule corp.

Goku - *introduces everyone to Yellow and Elric*.

Elric and Vegeta - *almost gets into another fight*

Tien - stops them.

halfway the night

Yellow - *falls asleep*.
 
Elric - Bulma can i borrow a room? 

bulma - sure 3d floor second one right. 

Elric - *carries Yellow to her bed* good night Yellow.  *goes downstairs*.

Elric - Well then.

Goku - Hey Elric how about you stay here to help us protect earth.

Elric - ah why not, I'll help you guys.

 The last Elniër

 Chapter 1 the meeting

11 years later, earth


It was just a year after the defeat of buu. Goten and Goku were training.

Goten - KAMEHAMEHAA *fires the attack*.

Goku - *manages to block it* *kicks Goten*.

Chi-chi - Boys dinner.

Goku and Goten - *immediately go inside to eat*.

Gohan - *smiles* slow down Goten leave some for me.


Suddenly 2 big powers appeared on the planet.

Goku and his sons - *instantly looks south*. 

Goku - Chi-chi we need to go investigate.

All 3 - *flies off*.

All 3 - *sees Vegeta Trunks and Piccolo outside*. 

Goten - Hey guys.

Vegeta - Oh the clown and his spawns are here.

Goku - Vegeta don’t be like that said *tries to look sad*.

Piccolo - Let’s just ensure those powers aren’t dangerous.

Gohan - Ok Mr Piccolo.


Meanwhile a 15 year old kid in complete yellow clothing and a yellow scarf was looking from a hill at a town together with a 11 year old girl in a dress and leather shoes.

the boy - Were here Yellow. 

Yellow - Yeah this planet looks wonderful Orange I mean Elric.
 
Elric - Yeah sure whatever.

Yellow - Elric can I go into the town? 

Elric - No Yellow. 

Yellow - Please Elric. 

Elric - Yellow.

Yellow - Please. 

Elric - Ugh fine you get 4 hours.

Yellow - Thank you Elric.

Elric - Don’t mention it.

Yellow - (hopefully i can find some cool stuff.)

Elric - (Yellow we aren't thieves, we are gonna pay so you have to watch your money.)

Yellow - (Elric stop reading my mind.)

Elric - (too bad that you are to young to read my mind.)

Yellow - (i'm going, bye Elric)

Elric - *looks as Yellow walks towards the town*.

Elric *waits for 3½ hour*

the z fighters - *arrived*.

Elric - *looks at them feeling their power* (the 2 kids are too weak, the 3 grown ups are about my strength and the namekian is unbelievable strong.)

Elric - *glares at them* what is the problem namek?

Trunks - I will beat this 1 *rushes towards Elric*.

Elric - *dodges and spin kicked Trunks* *punches him in the stomach*.

Gohan - *rushes in and starts fighting with Elric*.

Yellow - *shows up*.

Vegeta - This 1 is mine *flies towards Yellow*.

Elric - *sees it and manages to stop Vegeta*. 

Elric - Yellow run, go find a safe place.
 
Gohan - *heard it and gets unsure*.  Is he really a threat dad? asked he seems to be nice.

Elric - You filthy saiyan Elric.

Everyone - *gets stunned by what Elric said* 

Gohan - but you are also a Saiyan.

Elric - *looks at Gohan like he is crazy* no I am a full Elniër.
 
Vegeta - *smirks* more like half ëlnier half saiyan.

Elric - *glares at him* and now to stop your evil ways.
 
Goku - Wait we are not evil, we wanted to check if you weren’t dangerous.

Elric - Then why did you guys attack me first.

Piccolo - It’s in Vegeta’s family.

Elric - So you guys let the prince of the worthless live but decide to kill a few elniërs? I don’t follow you guys.

Goku - Vegeta why didn’t you tell us about them?

Vegeta - Because their race doesn’t matter Kakarot.

Elric - *glares at Vegeta you worthless saiyan*.

Vegeta - *gets angry* what did you say lowlife scum.

Goku - Guys stop now.

Elric - Fine whatever you want, I am going to get my sis.

Elric - *flies off*.

Piccolo - Should we really trust him?

Gohan - Why not?

Piccolo - Because he has a high power and he hates Vegeta.

Gohan - ever met anyone from space that doesn't hate Vegeta or the saiyans?

Goku - Let’s just see how he is.

16 minutes later
 
Elric - *comes back with Yellow* Well then … this is my little sis Yellow and my name is Elric. 

Goku - Hi Elric and Yellow.


Yellow - H-hi everyone.

Goku - *introduced everyone to the 2 demi elniërs*.

Gohan - Sorry that we tried to kill you 2.

Yellow - Its okay.

Elric - (i swear she takes apologies to fast)

Goku - Hey let’s introduce you guys to the others. 

Yellow - Okay.

Elric and Vegeta - whatever *both glare at each other*. 

Everyone - *flies off towards capsule corp calling the others with their power*.

Once everyone was at capsule corp.

Goku - *introduces everyone to Yellow and Elric*.

Elric and Vegeta - *almost gets into another fight*

Tien - stops them.

halfway the night

Yellow - *falls asleep*.
 
Elric - Bulma can i borrow a room? 

bulma - sure 3d floor second one right. 

Elric - *carries Yellow to her bed* good night Yellow.  *goes downstairs*.

Elric - Well then.

Goku - Hey Elric how about you stay here to help us protect earth.

Elric - ah why not, I'll help you guys.

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imamonster chapter 1 is here

Greenluigi here is chapter 1

hope everyone enjoys
imamonster chapter 1 is here

Greenluigi here is chapter 1

hope everyone enjoys
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Few things, great story. But it contraditcs Z where Goku states that he is going to get Uub to train. Also, That * Is actually bugging me a bit.

The story was good though, and it was a fun read.
Few things, great story. But it contraditcs Z where Goku states that he is going to get Uub to train. Also, That * Is actually bugging me a bit.

The story was good though, and it was a fun read.
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imamonster actually Goku taking Uub to train happens 10 years after kid buu's defeat, this is only 1 year after so it doesn't contradict since Uub hasn't appeared yet.

maybe i'll cut the * away, i don't know.
imamonster actually Goku taking Uub to train happens 10 years after kid buu's defeat, this is only 1 year after so it doesn't contradict since Uub hasn't appeared yet.

maybe i'll cut the * away, i don't know.
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