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NintendoFanKimmy: Legend in the Making - Chapter Ten
01-13-14 12:50 PM
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“Ready? Get set… Go!” signaled Jerry, and the ambush on the Titan Dweevil had begun. Everyone did as they were told; greenluigi jabbed its leg with his pocket-knife, NintendoFanKimmy punched that same leg and Jerry shot at it with his handgun. The only thing that didn’t go as planned was their getaway. The whole ambush was supposed to be a hit and run sort of attack. Just so it would start chasing them, giving time for the poor, battered up Louie to catch his breath. They did hit, but they didn’t run. Just as they were making their escape, three of the Titan Dweevil’s eight robotic spider legs pinned each of them, excluding Louie of course, to the ground by their stomachs. “Hey, let us go, nut job!” yelled Jerry, trying and failing to struggle free. Kimmy gulped. “I hope what is has in store for us is not too brutal…” Her wish had not come true. The leg which all three heroes had attacked had regenerated, and was mobile again. Using three of its eight legs to pin its opponents down, it still had five legs free, each of them with a sharp, pointy tip. Green began to whimper. “Help! Somebody help!” He frantically wriggled his wrist, with his knife still in hand, in a pathetic attempt in breaking himself free. “If you do what I think you are going to do,” began greenluigi, “you are going to regret it big time!” Then, both NintendoFankimmy and Jerry looked at him in confusion. They all knew, though, that it couldn’t be. If it did do what they thought it was going to do, it wouldn’t regret it. Well, if it did, it certainly wouldn’t be them who would cause is to. There would be no ‘them’ anymore. Except for rotting, pierced corpses, if those count. Anyway, back to the scene our story left off from. “We can bribe it!” suggested Kimmy. Jerry cursed under his breath. “How are we going to do that, genius? You think it speaks English?” He had a point. “Darn… Now what?” Finally, green had a sense of realism to him. “Nothing…” They all knew it was true. While no one could see because of his red sunglasses, Jerry snapped his eyes shut. “Brace yourselves!” They all did. While standing on two legs and pinning the heroes down with three, the Titan Dweevil used its remaining three legs to strike through them all at the same time. I raised them high up and into position, and was about to strike until – boom! A Yellow Pikmin had been thrown at the Titan Dweevil, and it attacked its equivalent of a knee joint with its bud just as it was popping into a flower. To the Titan Dweevil, it was just like being hit in the funny bone, and its central nervous system went haywire. Now, the only question remaining is: was it for better – or for worse? To answer, it was a bit of both, really. The good part was that its legs that were originally going to pierce through greenluigi, NintendoFanKimmy, and Jerry’s hearts went completely numb. The bad part? The other two legs it was standing on began to malfunction and become wobbly. As instinct to ensure it would not collapse, it firmed up its other three legs that were pinning green, Kimmy, and Jerry to the ground. As a result, its sharp points slipped past, and its blade-like sides slightly slashed each one’s stomach. Kimmy yelped a painfully sounding, “Ouch!”, Jerry simply let out an agonizing groan, and green just flat-out passed out. He had a low pain tolerance, evidently. Eventually, though, it collapsed on its side, freeing the trio. Jerry plopped an unconscious greenluigi on his back, and a limping NintendoFanKimmy frailly tagged along behind him, looking for their savior. Jerry, as usual, though, had his suspicions. “Who’s there?” He asked, even thought he was pretty sure that it was Louie, as it was a Pikmin who had been thrown at their attacker. Although, Louie was in too poor of a condition to have done that, and he had mentioned he had a friend of his who was even more experienced than himself with the creatures. According to Louie, his friend’s closest Pikmin friend was a small, Yellow one. She was the first one he met. And, has Jerry had just realized, that was the one who sabotaged the Titan Dweevil. Then, it hit him – Olimar was the one to the rescue. Just in time, he was. And, they found him, too. Holding his best friend, Louie, on his back, and his flock of Pikmin at his side. “Come with me, you poor things.” Captain of the Pikmin Olimar said. “You guys obviously need some help. I’ll provide that for you. This way.” Jerry lost his suspicions and followed desperately. Kimmy didn’t hesitate to tag along, either. They needed what they could get. NintendoFanKimmy:
“Ready? Get set… Go!” signaled Jerry, and the ambush on the Titan Dweevil had begun. Everyone did as they were told; greenluigi jabbed its leg with his pocket-knife, NintendoFanKimmy punched that same leg and Jerry shot at it with his handgun. The only thing that didn’t go as planned was their getaway. The whole ambush was supposed to be a hit and run sort of attack. Just so it would start chasing them, giving time for the poor, battered up Louie to catch his breath. They did hit, but they didn’t run. Just as they were making their escape, three of the Titan Dweevil’s eight robotic spider legs pinned each of them, excluding Louie of course, to the ground by their stomachs. “Hey, let us go, nut job!” yelled Jerry, trying and failing to struggle free. Kimmy gulped. “I hope what is has in store for us is not too brutal…” Her wish had not come true. The leg which all three heroes had attacked had regenerated, and was mobile again. Using three of its eight legs to pin its opponents down, it still had five legs free, each of them with a sharp, pointy tip. Green began to whimper. “Help! Somebody help!” He frantically wriggled his wrist, with his knife still in hand, in a pathetic attempt in breaking himself free. “If you do what I think you are going to do,” began greenluigi, “you are going to regret it big time!” Then, both NintendoFankimmy and Jerry looked at him in confusion. They all knew, though, that it couldn’t be. If it did do what they thought it was going to do, it wouldn’t regret it. Well, if it did, it certainly wouldn’t be them who would cause is to. There would be no ‘them’ anymore. Except for rotting, pierced corpses, if those count. Anyway, back to the scene our story left off from. “We can bribe it!” suggested Kimmy. Jerry cursed under his breath. “How are we going to do that, genius? You think it speaks English?” He had a point. “Darn… Now what?” Finally, green had a sense of realism to him. “Nothing…” They all knew it was true. While no one could see because of his red sunglasses, Jerry snapped his eyes shut. “Brace yourselves!” They all did. While standing on two legs and pinning the heroes down with three, the Titan Dweevil used its remaining three legs to strike through them all at the same time. I raised them high up and into position, and was about to strike until – boom! A Yellow Pikmin had been thrown at the Titan Dweevil, and it attacked its equivalent of a knee joint with its bud just as it was popping into a flower. To the Titan Dweevil, it was just like being hit in the funny bone, and its central nervous system went haywire. Now, the only question remaining is: was it for better – or for worse? To answer, it was a bit of both, really. The good part was that its legs that were originally going to pierce through greenluigi, NintendoFanKimmy, and Jerry’s hearts went completely numb. The bad part? The other two legs it was standing on began to malfunction and become wobbly. As instinct to ensure it would not collapse, it firmed up its other three legs that were pinning green, Kimmy, and Jerry to the ground. As a result, its sharp points slipped past, and its blade-like sides slightly slashed each one’s stomach. Kimmy yelped a painfully sounding, “Ouch!”, Jerry simply let out an agonizing groan, and green just flat-out passed out. He had a low pain tolerance, evidently. Eventually, though, it collapsed on its side, freeing the trio. Jerry plopped an unconscious greenluigi on his back, and a limping NintendoFanKimmy frailly tagged along behind him, looking for their savior. Jerry, as usual, though, had his suspicions. “Who’s there?” He asked, even thought he was pretty sure that it was Louie, as it was a Pikmin who had been thrown at their attacker. Although, Louie was in too poor of a condition to have done that, and he had mentioned he had a friend of his who was even more experienced than himself with the creatures. According to Louie, his friend’s closest Pikmin friend was a small, Yellow one. She was the first one he met. And, has Jerry had just realized, that was the one who sabotaged the Titan Dweevil. Then, it hit him – Olimar was the one to the rescue. Just in time, he was. And, they found him, too. Holding his best friend, Louie, on his back, and his flock of Pikmin at his side. “Come with me, you poor things.” Captain of the Pikmin Olimar said. “You guys obviously need some help. I’ll provide that for you. This way.” Jerry lost his suspicions and followed desperately. Kimmy didn’t hesitate to tag along, either. They needed what they could get. |
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This is the first installment that I've read in this story. How many have I missed?
Anyway, it looks interesting. You did a pretty good job keeping the text from sounding redundant. A lot of people fail to realize that you can say similar things using different words to make your point without repeating the same words too close together, or you can sound redundant even when saying different things if you use the same words. Basically what I'm trying to say is, you showed a true writer's vocabulary, and it kept your lengtht post interesting. Nicely done. 
Note: some people will instantly realize that this post was a bit of a run on sentence. My apologies. lol Anyway, it looks interesting. You did a pretty good job keeping the text from sounding redundant. A lot of people fail to realize that you can say similar things using different words to make your point without repeating the same words too close together, or you can sound redundant even when saying different things if you use the same words. Basically what I'm trying to say is, you showed a true writer's vocabulary, and it kept your lengtht post interesting. Nicely done.
Note: some people will instantly realize that this post was a bit of a run on sentence. My apologies. lol |
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Eirinn : Thank you for your compliments! I highly appreciate them . As for the installments of this story you have missed... Think about it. This is chapter ten. What numbers come before ten? Ha ha, I am just teasing  . Anyway, again, I appreciate your compliments on this chapter, and they really motivate me ^^!. As for the installments of this story you have missed... Think about it. This is chapter ten. What numbers come before ten? Ha ha, I am just teasing . Anyway, again, I appreciate your compliments on this chapter, and they really motivate me ^^! |
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NintendoFanKimmy : I wonder in the next chapter if they defeated the Titan dweevil but the other peice of the XZH hack |
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*facepalm* It really does say chapter ten in the title, doesn't it? Lol My bad. Not sure how I missed that. So I'm guessing rhe next chapter will be called Chapter eleven?? xD |
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