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A poem in my notebook

 

07-13-11 08:56 AM
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Misguided
The story you write has become absurd,
To continue this path will lead to the curb,
Never leaning to see around the bend,
For all you know it was room to mend,
If you restart in a better direction,
You'll be left with no question,
Where you end up you'll never know,
But your choices will let it show,
Don't let your path be led astray,
For you will be left to surely  fade,
I know your story has become misguided,
So now you must rewrite it
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If there are enough replies I will post another from my notebook
thank you and constructive criticism is appreciated
Misguided
The story you write has become absurd,
To continue this path will lead to the curb,
Never leaning to see around the bend,
For all you know it was room to mend,
If you restart in a better direction,
You'll be left with no question,
Where you end up you'll never know,
But your choices will let it show,
Don't let your path be led astray,
For you will be left to surely  fade,
I know your story has become misguided,
So now you must rewrite it
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If there are enough replies I will post another from my notebook
thank you and constructive criticism is appreciated
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07-16-11 04:32 PM
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That is... strange. You should maybe make like an authors note that tells about like what the poem is about or something, otherwise I have no idea what you are saying.
That is... strange. You should maybe make like an authors note that tells about like what the poem is about or something, otherwise I have no idea what you are saying.
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