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03-12-06 08:46 PM
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Me and David decided that I should have a weekly poem to post on the board.. So every sunday, look for my most recent poem... Heres week 1 of my weekly poem.

This one is from my newest poetry book "The Flash of Lightning Behind the Mountain" by Charles Bukowski

Nice Guy
I broke his bank, totaled his car and slept with
his wife.
of course, everbody was sleeping with his
wife but a nicer guy you never
met.
T. K. Kemper played a couple of years with
the Green Bay Packers
then a bad knee got him.
he went into automotive repair,
did very good work.
he was a
lousy card player; we'd get him
drunk and take it all from
him,
his wife lurking in the background, her tits
hanging out.
T. K. Kemper
big big guy.
hands like hams.
honest blue eyes.
give you the shrit off his back.
give you his back if he could
one night after work he saw two punks
snatch a purse from an old
lady.
he ran after them trying to get that purse
back.
he was gaining on them when
one of the punks turned, had a gun, fired
5 shots.
he was a big, big guy.
he caught all 5 shots, hit the pavement
hard, didn't move
there was a good crowd at the funeral.
his wife cried.
my friend Eddie consoled her,
then took her home and f***ed
her

T. K. Kemper.
bad knee.
good heart.

he was not meant for this indifferent world.

only with supreme luck did he last
29 years.....



Thoughts anyone?
Me and David decided that I should have a weekly poem to post on the board.. So every sunday, look for my most recent poem... Heres week 1 of my weekly poem.

This one is from my newest poetry book "The Flash of Lightning Behind the Mountain" by Charles Bukowski

Nice Guy
I broke his bank, totaled his car and slept with
his wife.
of course, everbody was sleeping with his
wife but a nicer guy you never
met.
T. K. Kemper played a couple of years with
the Green Bay Packers
then a bad knee got him.
he went into automotive repair,
did very good work.
he was a
lousy card player; we'd get him
drunk and take it all from
him,
his wife lurking in the background, her tits
hanging out.
T. K. Kemper
big big guy.
hands like hams.
honest blue eyes.
give you the shrit off his back.
give you his back if he could
one night after work he saw two punks
snatch a purse from an old
lady.
he ran after them trying to get that purse
back.
he was gaining on them when
one of the punks turned, had a gun, fired
5 shots.
he was a big, big guy.
he caught all 5 shots, hit the pavement
hard, didn't move
there was a good crowd at the funeral.
his wife cried.
my friend Eddie consoled her,
then took her home and f***ed
her

T. K. Kemper.
bad knee.
good heart.

he was not meant for this indifferent world.

only with supreme luck did he last
29 years.....



Thoughts anyone?
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That was different.
A few cuss word's id rather not see.

Its more of a story then a poem. But cool storie anyways
That was different.
A few cuss word's id rather not see.

Its more of a story then a poem. But cool storie anyways
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well, its free verse poetry (no rhyme scheme).. and the cuss words are part of the poem... I don't wanna alter the poem, so I put it on exactly how it is in the book...
well, its free verse poetry (no rhyme scheme).. and the cuss words are part of the poem... I don't wanna alter the poem, so I put it on exactly how it is in the book...
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wow, that was powerful

not much else i can say
wow, that was powerful

not much else i can say
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It's about time for a new poem?
It's about time for a new poem?
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This weeks poem is another Bukowski poem.. Only because I'm obsessed with him.... next week I'll switch it up


heart in the cage

frenzy in the marketplace.
cities burn.
the world shakes and calls for
democracy.
democracy doesn't work.
Christianity doesn't work.
nor Atheism.
nothing works but the gun
and the man on
top.
the centuries change and
Man remains the
same.
love buckles and dissolves:
hatred is the only
reality
on continents and in
rooms of two
people.
nothing works but the gun
and the man on
top.
all else is
meaningless.

frenzy in the marketplace.
cities burn
to be rebuilt to
burn again.

democracy doesn't work.
Christianity doesn't work.
nor Atheism.
it's just the gun,
the gun and the man on
top.
This weeks poem is another Bukowski poem.. Only because I'm obsessed with him.... next week I'll switch it up


heart in the cage

frenzy in the marketplace.
cities burn.
the world shakes and calls for
democracy.
democracy doesn't work.
Christianity doesn't work.
nor Atheism.
nothing works but the gun
and the man on
top.
the centuries change and
Man remains the
same.
love buckles and dissolves:
hatred is the only
reality
on continents and in
rooms of two
people.
nothing works but the gun
and the man on
top.
all else is
meaningless.

frenzy in the marketplace.
cities burn
to be rebuilt to
burn again.

democracy doesn't work.
Christianity doesn't work.
nor Atheism.
it's just the gun,
the gun and the man on
top.
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That reminds me of V for Vendeta.
AMAZING MOVIE.
That reminds me of V for Vendeta.
AMAZING MOVIE.
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Alright this is Week 3 of the weekly poem.. and this poem is from 'The Lost Writings of Jim Morrison: Wilderness'
Jim Morrison, the lead singer of The Doors is said to be the last great American poet..

Road Days

fear of Plane death

And night was what Night
should be
A girl, a bottle, & blessed sleep

I have ploughed
My seed thru the heart
of the nations.
Injected a germ in the psychic blood vein.

Now I embrace the poetry
of buisness & become--for
a time--a "Prince of Industry"

A natural leader, a poet,
a Shaman, w/the
soul of a clown.

What am I doing
in the Bull Ring
Arena
Every public figure
running for Leader

Spectators at the Tomb
-riot watchers

Fear of Eyes
Assassination

Being drunkk is a good disguise.

I drink so I
can talk to a**h***s.
This includes me.

The horror of business

The Problem of Money
guilt
do I deserve it?

The Meeting
Rid of Managers & agents

After 4 yrs. I'm left w/a
Mind like a fuzzy hammer

regret for wasted nights
& wasted years
I pissed it all away
American Music

End w/fond good-bye
& plans for future
--Not an actor
Writer-filmmaker

Which of my cellves
will be remember'd

Good-bye America
I loved you

Money from home
good luck
stay out of trouble


(Mind you Jim Morrison was an abid Acid user)
Alright this is Week 3 of the weekly poem.. and this poem is from 'The Lost Writings of Jim Morrison: Wilderness'
Jim Morrison, the lead singer of The Doors is said to be the last great American poet..

Road Days

fear of Plane death

And night was what Night
should be
A girl, a bottle, & blessed sleep

I have ploughed
My seed thru the heart
of the nations.
Injected a germ in the psychic blood vein.

Now I embrace the poetry
of buisness & become--for
a time--a "Prince of Industry"

A natural leader, a poet,
a Shaman, w/the
soul of a clown.

What am I doing
in the Bull Ring
Arena
Every public figure
running for Leader

Spectators at the Tomb
-riot watchers

Fear of Eyes
Assassination

Being drunkk is a good disguise.

I drink so I
can talk to a**h***s.
This includes me.

The horror of business

The Problem of Money
guilt
do I deserve it?

The Meeting
Rid of Managers & agents

After 4 yrs. I'm left w/a
Mind like a fuzzy hammer

regret for wasted nights
& wasted years
I pissed it all away
American Music

End w/fond good-bye
& plans for future
--Not an actor
Writer-filmmaker

Which of my cellves
will be remember'd

Good-bye America
I loved you

Money from home
good luck
stay out of trouble


(Mind you Jim Morrison was an abid Acid user)
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I dont get poety.. It dosnt make sence. But for a weekly poem, dont u think its time for a new poem?
I dont get poety.. It dosnt make sence. But for a weekly poem, dont u think its time for a new poem?
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WOW i never saw this... ever... good stuff though
WOW i never saw this... ever... good stuff though
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Im still waiting on a new poem.
Im still waiting on a new poem.
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I quit doing it because nobody replied.. SO REPLY THIS TIME!!! N I'll start again, and I'll post a new one on sunday...
I quit doing it because nobody replied.. SO REPLY THIS TIME!!! N I'll start again, and I'll post a new one on sunday...
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kewl, < spam >
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Hey yo yo, the first poem is aright. The second is not too wonderful. Its not despairing in the same way a Poe Poem might be, just whiny.
Hey yo yo, the first poem is aright. The second is not too wonderful. Its not despairing in the same way a Poe Poem might be, just whiny.
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If you do this poem, ill go finish that flash clip with you in it.
If you do this poem, ill go finish that flash clip with you in it.
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Well i am going to keep this going. I will try to post one as often as i can. I would like some feed back on these. Here it goes.

Bluebird
By Charles Bukowski

there's a bluebird in my heart that
wants to get out
but I'm too tough for him,
I say, stay in there, I'm not going
to let anybody see
you.

there's a bluebird in my heart that
wants to get out
but I pur whiskey on him and inhale
cigarette smoke
and the whores and the bartenders
and the grocery clerks
never know that
he's
in there.


there's a bluebird in my heart that
wants to get out
but I'm too tough for him,
I say,
stay down, do you want to mess
me up?
you want to screw up the
works?
you want to blow my book sales in
Europe?

there's a bluebird in my heart that
wants to get out
but I'm too clever, I only let him out
at night sometimes
when everybody's asleep.
I say, I know that you're there,
so don't be
sad.
then I put him back,
but he's singing a little
in there, I haven't quite let him
die
and we sleep together like
that
with our
secret pact
and it's nice enough to
make a man
weep, but I don't
weep, do
you?
Well i am going to keep this going. I will try to post one as often as i can. I would like some feed back on these. Here it goes.

Bluebird
By Charles Bukowski

there's a bluebird in my heart that
wants to get out
but I'm too tough for him,
I say, stay in there, I'm not going
to let anybody see
you.

there's a bluebird in my heart that
wants to get out
but I pur whiskey on him and inhale
cigarette smoke
and the whores and the bartenders
and the grocery clerks
never know that
he's
in there.


there's a bluebird in my heart that
wants to get out
but I'm too tough for him,
I say,
stay down, do you want to mess
me up?
you want to screw up the
works?
you want to blow my book sales in
Europe?

there's a bluebird in my heart that
wants to get out
but I'm too clever, I only let him out
at night sometimes
when everybody's asleep.
I say, I know that you're there,
so don't be
sad.
then I put him back,
but he's singing a little
in there, I haven't quite let him
die
and we sleep together like
that
with our
secret pact
and it's nice enough to
make a man
weep, but I don't
weep, do
you?
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