A Short Story

By: Barathemos

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Chapter2

“ Why are you here “ The dark shadow asked Magic and Lebron. “ Why have
I been summoned?”  
“ Wha, What are you?” Magic asked shivering in terror.
“ Me? I am the great Keeper of the mountain; I have not been summoned
for over 1,000 years. Why have you called me today?” The Keeper answered.
“ Summoned you? How have we done
that?” Magic asked still shivering.
“ Do not be afraid of me, unless you have come to conquer me, than you
should be afraid.” The Keeper said.  “ I
am Utopia, also know by my friends as the grim reaper. I am quite friendly.”
“ Utopia? But, I still do not get how we were to summon you.” Lebron
said in a mild tone, trying to stay calm.
“ Whenever someone harnesses the  true power of the volcano, I am brought
fourth, and that is what you did.” Utopia answered.
“ So you won’t kill us?” Magic asked, making it seem like a normal
question to ask.
“ Not unless you try to kill me first.” Utopia answered. “ Then, you will
be annihilated.”
“ So want do you want from us?” Lebron asked.
“ I want you to use your powers to help me out.” Utopia said. “ It will
not be anything too bad but you will have to use your powers and use some
thought processes.”
“ Can we leave now?” Lebron asked.
“ Are you stupid?!?!” Utopia asked. “ Why would I let you go now? I
need your help. If you do not do what I say then I will take your powers from
you at this point in time.”
“ Fine, what do you want us to do?” Lebron asked.
“ I will give you some simple directions.” Utopia answered. “ You are
to jump back into the volcano where you are to find a small white space craft.
After that, you will get in , take the key and start the engine.  You will than exit the volcano and go to your
destination, about 5 hours away. The craft will take you straight there so you
will not have to worry about where you are going.  After you launch, you shall find something to
do. In the glove compartment, you will find a deck of cards and some snacks to
eat on your way there. When you get to your destination, planet Zexlaforum, you
will be given directions by an automated message. You are too then hide the space
craft so that no one can find it. Make sure you remember when you put it so you
can come back. That is about it. Any questions?”
“ No.” Magic replied.
“ Well then, you might as well go on your way.” Utopia said, very
cheerfully.
Find my first chapter of my story below and read it before reading this
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a comment.
https://www.vizzed.com/boards/thread.php?id=57607
Hope you enjoyed reading! If you found something wrong, please tell me
how to fix it.
This is an original work by me and cannot be copy righted or copied.
Please do not say anything bad
about anyone who may be reading this. This was a
complete work of my imagination that put some things I like into to make it
more interesting. Thank you for reading and stay tuned for Chapter 3!

Two questions: First, do you realize you posted this in General Chat? I think it belongs in the stories area. Second, did you copy-paste this from something you already have written? The formatting is awkward and makes it weird to read. Actually, I lied. I have a few more questions.

Is Magic and Lebron a basketball reference? Lol.

Why did you post chapter 2 separate from chapter 1?

No more questions. I will have to say, though, there's a lot of dialogue and not a lot of action. It's hard to paint a picture of a story when your characters are just talking. You can utilize characters' actions to tell a story behind the story, where some of the characters are saying something but really mean something else. I'd think about that some.

Other than that, it's not bad. Keep working on it!