So i was walking home from school one day, it was dark, our school always seemed to have gotten out right at night fall, it always creeped me out, i don't know why, but it did, anyway, i was walking home and as i was walking, i was thinking about a game i had lost, about 2 weeks ago, i missed it alot, but i did not have the money to buy it back, i wish i did, but then, about half way home, i saw a abandon house, i was curious so i went inside, when i got inside i saw a copy of the game i wanted just...on the floor of the living room, i got very excited! so i ran home right away! eager to put the game in, by the way the game was actually legend of zelda ocarina of time, so i got home and i put it in, but when i turned it on, it did not go to the title screen, instead a text box appeared, it read "you fool", i thought for sure i made a mistake, that the game was hacked, that i probably should not have picked it up, it was like being rickrolled, i sure felt like a fool, but i pressed the "A" button on my controller anyway, it faded to the real title screen, only this time a bloody link appeared on the title screen, it flash in and then out, then it faded to black, then i peed myself, then another text box appeared, but this one said: "there is no escape, you cannot hide. your mine", it was then i was truly scared, so i turned the game off, i grabbed the cartridge, and i smashed it to bits with a hammer and a bat, then i ran to my parents and told them what had happened, they told me that they have seen that cartridge before, that they forgot to tell me to never touch it, i was still scared, they ask me if i did destroy it, i replied "yes" they were very proud of me, but i was still a bit scared, they told me it was ok now, i believed them, they also bought me a new, safe, copy of the game. but before i played it, i burned the remains of the other one and threw the burned bits in a lake a lived near, then i went back home, feeling pretty good, after that day i never bought or picked up another game again.

this was my 2nd creepypasta, i hope you guys and gals enjoyed reading it, i think it was way better then my first though i feel pretty good about it. thanks for reading.

Hey man, Ender44 here. I try not to be critical but I read a lot of creepypastas and I listen to commentaries on them (check out Yuri of wind by the way, he did commentaries on them and he does a bunch of other stuff about video games) I think you going "then I peed myself" is just weird, it kind of throws off from the story and it makes people wonder, "well why is he still playing the game, I mean come on he peed himself". So I don't enjoy being critical but I hope this comment could help you write better (not to say that your was bad) see, I cant be critical is the person who made it can see my critical...ism right up front. I'm just glad Myamoto from Nintendo cant see my reviews.

Well thanks for the feedback, al be sure to write my next creepypasta a little more careful, it definitely matters then it keeps focus on the main story other then the character.