My review of SM64

Super Mario 64 is a very popular game that is enjoyed even now. I have played the sequel for the DS and I'll admit the DS version was better with more stars and bigger challenges and more characters to play with while the original had only Mario. This game is not very hard once you get used to the controls, know the story, know what to do to get a star, or you are familiar with it's 3D graphics (playing the sequel, playing other games like Super Mario RPG). This game is long with over 100 stars but the story is the same as always: Peach sends a note to Mario saying to come to the castle for cake, Bowser kidnaps her, and Mario rescues her only this time you must fight him multiple times to progress. All-in-all, I think this is a great game and recommend it to my friends.

PioPark1 : I love Super Mario 64. It's a great game. Although I don't like it as much as games like Super Mario World or SMB3 it's still a great game.

As far as the review itself goes, it seems that you were all over the place.

Instead of hitting key topics like what you liked about the controls/graphics/story etc you gave more of an overview on the beginning. Also saying you like the DS version in the beginning of the review isn't really relative. If you have to say something like that, it's better kept to the end of the review.

Those are just my suggestions though you can take them or leave them as you wish.

Also it seems that you posted this 4 times, which I'm not sure how you managed that. Please try to be more careful in the future.

Time to review your review. *puts on sunglasses*

Like the guy above me said, your review was all over the place, and didn't focus on one subject at a time. The spelling and grammar was adequate, but that doesn't give you any bonus points. Plus you didn't do a fantastic job of describing the story and game mechanics. Also, this is a review of the original, not the Nintendo DS version. You could maybe mention it at the end, as a small side note, but don't talk about it for most of the review, which brings me to my next point, the review was too short. Seriously, when your review is one paragraph long (I know mine is, but there's not a whole lot you can write about someone else's review) there's not a whole lot you can fit in there. Next time try going more in depth about the subject. Alright? Alright.

This was an ok review that you put for us but like the other three people above me you got to talk about Super Mario 64 not the ds version and tell about the graphic, difficulty something that will catch are eyes and would like to play the game more often. Just remember that in the future but  probably this is the first time you did a review.