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One of my favorite games for N64
04-09-12 10:38 PM
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This is one of the first games
This is one of the first games
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04-09-12 11:30 PM
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A few sentences start with "The" and "But". A couple sentences have misplaced comma's. There are a few spelling errors, be sure to use spell check to be lazy about it. A couple of the first words you use after a comma have nothing joining it as an independent thought, you have to be careful about that because I have the same problem. You made mentioned a few points as an example and used that same point throughout your review, while there is nothing wrong with that it made it a little less interesting then it otherwise would have been. Lastly there are a lot of instances where you talk about your personal experience which isn't a bad thing but people want to read a review of the game, not just what you think about it. You have to stay somewhat neutral, like a commentator, if you want people to see it as a review and not just your personal thoughts. I'm not saying don't use your own experience or anything like that, maybe just use it a little less. Other then that your review contains very good information and makes the game sound interesting. Don't just take my word for it though, have a couple other people comment on it and then revise it from there. It is the start of a very good review, you just gotta polish it a little more, don't worry about it! I definitely gotta do that same to my own! |
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04-09-12 11:43 PM
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Well, I'm not going to dock you on starting a few sentences with 'But' or 'The'. Anyway, I have no problem with using personal experiences in a review. I try to keep that stuff mainly in my intro paragraphs, but that is just my style. Just because it isn't completely unbiased doesn't make it any less of a review. I enjoyed reading it. Keep it up. |
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04-09-12 11:44 PM
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Jimmityjam : thank you for your opinion. I will try to work on my grammatical errors, oh wise English teacher. lol'ing. And also, I will try to incorporate a little less personally experience, and a little more game play into my next review. Thanks you for your opinions |
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04-09-12 11:51 PM
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rcarter2 I'd just like to specify that my own review is littered with errors and I don't mean to sound like his review isn't good. thing1 rcarter2 is right that using your own experience isn't really bad, but I just meant that I feel keeping your thoughts a little more seperated is a good idea. thing1 rcarter2 is right that using your own experience isn't really bad, but I just meant that I feel keeping your thoughts a little more seperated is a good idea. |
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04-09-12 11:56 PM
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Jimmityjam : rcarter2 : thank you for your opinions. i think i might actually try to apply for game reviewer as well as chat mod and noobie helper when david opens up applications again rcarter2 : thank you for your opinions. i think i might actually try to apply for game reviewer as well as chat mod and noobie helper when david opens up applications again |
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04-10-12 09:53 AM
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It was a decent enough review, although the grammatical errors, and punctuation errors make this review more difficult to read. Moving forward, if you can correct these errors, your reviews would be pretty darn good.
Keep working at it! Keep working at it! |
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04-10-12 11:31 AM
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Jordanv78 : Thank you for the confidence boost. I actually have three or four more I would like to review... but I will until late to do those ones. But, in your opinion, do you think I should take out a little of the personal experience? |
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04-10-12 12:45 PM
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thing1 : No. I feel like the personal experience is one of the better parts of the review. Keep that in, just fix up the grammar and punctuation and you will have a very solid review. |
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04-10-12 12:49 PM
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Jordanv78 : O Kay, thanks. But do you think I have it in me to be a Retro Game Reviewer? I kind of liked doing the Game Review cause it got me stats for Tour De Vizzed, leveled me up, and I actually knew what I was talking about. |
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04-10-12 08:38 PM
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I was never that big of a fan of Star Wars games, or Racing games in general, but Star Wars 1 Racer is pretty nice game. I have a lot of fun playing it, heck, I actually owned it back when it was released. Its very fun to play when you get the hang of it. |
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04-10-12 08:44 PM
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pacman1755 : Oh yeah. You have to get used to the game to actually enjoy it. But once you get the hang of it, it was one heck of a game, even if you do not like Star Wars. |
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04-11-12 04:54 AM
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i agree with Jordanv78 u should keep ur personal opinions in the review it made it that much more better other than that just check ur grammar when ur done and it would be one heck of a review this is one of my all time fav racing games |
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Before the rest of the Grammar Police show up . Great Job! I enjoy reading articles that involve personal experiences. It makes more connections between the reader and writer. I might try that game in the future. Thanks for the great review. |
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04-11-12 05:41 AM
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I would recommend you have your browser to auto check your spelling as you type because I had a hard time reading this, and thus didn't even finish reading the entire review. |
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tRIUNE : I have my computer check it, and I also use the spell check feature. Check back in a few hours, or when ever you see this. I love the rave about how good it is, but it is not good enough if I am hearing a lot about grammatical errors. |
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Well this will be the one and only time that I take back what I've said - I've just re-read this and now I don't know what I was referring to for this review, I think I was most likely mixing up yours with a review from someone else.
It's pretty much staff quality. It's pretty much staff quality. |
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04-11-12 10:11 AM
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tRIUNE: Thanks man. I put it through my Google chrome, then I did it in Word... did a lot of editing. Took out a bit of the fillers and unneeded stuff, and made it more simple. Then I put it back in here, and checked it again in Google chrome and using the spell check feature. This is going to mean a lot to me if I make staff. Thank Your for even considering me for staff. This is going to mean a lot to me if I make staff. Thank Your for even considering me for staff. |
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