Overall: 10/10
i am making a review about Grand Theft Auto 5 & i am pretty good playing & i like Franklin Clinton, Michael De Santa & Travor Philips & i like playing as all three of the Protagonists. all the three Protagonists did a alot of work for other characters & some characters even betreyed the Protagonists & on the last misson the third way Franklin Clinton,Michael De Santa & Travor Philips had to kill the characters Like Stretch,Devin Weston,Wei Cheng,Steven Haines. Franklin Clinton,Michael De Santa & Travor Philips even do the Strangers & Freaks missions


Graphics: 10/10
Graphics was good & the Graphics on the characters look so good

Sound:10/10
I would say that the sound looks good & the music in the game looks okay & i love the music where Michael De Santa is doing yoga.

Addictiveness: 10/10
well i already have Grand Theft Auto 5 & i love playing Grand Theft Auto 5 & it is the best game ever that i ever played.

Story: 10/10
I would say that story looks good & it had 69 story missions & here the list of the missions from Grand Theft Auto 5
Story Missions

Prologue
Franklin and Lamar
Repossession
Complications
Chop
The Long Stretch
Father/Son
Marriage Counseling
Daddy's Little Girl
Friend Request
Casing the Jewel Store
The Jewel Store Job
Mr. Philips
Nervous Ron
Friends Reunited
Trevor Philips Industries
Crystal Maze
Scouting the Port
Fame or Shame
Dead Man Walking
Three's Company
By The Book
Did Somebody Say Yoga?
Hood Safari
I Fought the Law...
Eye in the Sky
Deep Inside
Mr. Richards
Caida Libre
The Merryweather Heist
Blitz Play
Minor Turbulence
Predator
Derailed
Monkey Business
The Paleto Score
Hang Ten
Bury the Hatchet
Reuniting the Family
Pack Man
Cleaning Out the Bureau
Fresh Meat
Lamar Down
The Wrap Up
The Ballad of Rocco
Legal Trouble
Meltdown
The Bureau Raid
The Big Score
Something Sensible
The Time's Come
The Third Way

Depth:10/10
I think the game is alot bigger then san andreas in my opinion & i love how big Los Santo & Blaine County is & that is cool

Difficulty: 1/10
I would say that Grand Theft Auto 5 was gonna be easy for me when i know what i am doing & alot of the missions & Strangers & Freaks Missions doesn't seem to be that hard if you do your best on Grand Theft Auto 5

The most glaring issue with this review are the spoilers. Pretty much the entire overall section is giving away a big part of the story, namely the final missions, where you explicitly state what happens. One of the cardinal reviewing rules is "no spoilers".

As for the rest of the review, it was utterly un descriptive. You basically just say "good" and "great" for detail.

There's also a great deal of word buffer. That list of missions is pretty much pointless and takes up about 60% of the review.

It's really not an improvement on any of your other reviews. Talk to some experienced reviewers and they'll give you some pointers.

Boxia : As much as I do agree with you, one thing is that constantly telling him how his reviews are sub-par isn't the best thing either. What if he is genuinely not a detailed writer. Maybe writing isn't his strong suit. This might be the best that he can do, and just telling him it isn't good does him no good. Or maybe he really doesn't want to do detailed reviews. Though thorough reviews are generally praised around here, it isn't a requirement. Expecting everyone to do high quality reviews just deters people who aren't the best writers from even trying here.

I think it is pretty clear by now that this is either the best of his writing ability or he can do better but is not wanting to. Either way, pointing out what is wrong has not helped with the any times it has been done in this case, and might be pointless to even try.

Boxia & rcarter can you guys stop judging me i am doing my best on review on the games & i think my review on GTA 5 is Good

Enzo Matrix : you should try a review my style. I'll give you an example of one of my best reviews that I'm proud of. (Zelda twilight princess) Addictiveness: 10. I love this game so much that i would play it ANYWHERE and ANYTIME, as well as mega man 2 power fighters, But there are some problems with this game, First, Minda's voice actor is Japanese, second, Minda's voice sounds like she is cursing, third, there is a lot of blood. But still, i would play this game in my sleep!

Story: 9. I herd that this game is the next game after Ocarina of time. But enough of fan-rumors. Heres the story: In a small village of ordain, a guy named Russell was ordered to send something to Hyrule's princess, Zelda. Russell asked Link if he can take the object to Princess Zelda and Link nodded. The next day, Malo, Talo, and Beth, the Village kids, asked link if he can buy them a sling shot from Beth's mother's shop. (and after that is a lot of action i can't explain) after link teaches Malo how to use a sword, Malo and talo sees and chases a monkey and Russell's son, Collin, tells his father. (more action i cant explain.) after Link saved Malo, Malo and Talo got in trouble and Malo asked link for his sword. Link gives him his sword and both Collin and Link goes to the springs. I would continue the story but i cant explain most of it! silly me.
Read the whole thing here https://www.vizzed.com/boards/thread.php?id=81026 plus i agree with the others

Enzo Matrix : Did you even read my post? I specifically said that it wasn't good to be saying you did a bad job because you might be doing your best. Why was that post including me?

It's a miracle! He followed my advice!

Back to business. Great job on having all categories in your Review. That's a big step if you want to become a good Reviewer. I can say that this Review is much better than your first Review.

Tips for the next time -

- Don't spoil things. It is not fun to read a Review that tells the end of the story already.
-  That ''&'' thing. You keep using them the whole time in your phrases. It's not fun to read a Review if you keep using them. Try to make a sentence and after that an other sentence with your opinion. For example to be clear:

Your version:

''Addictiveness: 10/10
well i already have Grand Theft Auto 5 & i love playing Grand Theft Auto 5 & it is the best game ever that i ever played.''

My version:

''Addictiveness: 10/10
I have this game. I really loved to play this game because it is the best game that I ever played. The game keeps me playing forever, thanks to the nice sounds etc. (But with why + more information etc).''

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- Talking about your opinion, it's not explained well. You only say that it is good/great but I miss the ''WHY?'' part.
- Grammar, your grammar style needs some improvement. If your grammar is slightly better, we can understand the Review better.
- Don't post a huge list of missions, it is pointless and spammy. Just posting two or something like that is okay.

I'm not trying to be mean or anything like that. The only thing I want is to help you to become a Reviewer and for that I need to be strict. Also don't feel down because of all the negative comments. People are only trying to help you.

TornadoMudkip : that true & thanks