Bloodshed is basically a story I'm going to be writing, just for fun. I'm not really looking for feedback (though it would be great), mainly just for the pure sense of the fun of it. It's sort of going to be my first real story after a writer's block I had since last summer. I wasn't motivated to write at all. And I still am not. But I'm going to try and get into the habit of regularly writing, for my amusement and others. I'd be appreciative if you guys did give me some feedback, just don't go all out on me, lol. This is literally the first thing I'm wholeheartedly writing since... forever. If you are to reply to the thread, I'd appreciate it if it's honest and sort of "nice" feedback. I'm getting back into the groove of writing for amusement, so honesty is really the best policy here. But don't go all out on me by saying, "AW MAN U SUCK THE STORY ISNT EVN ADDICTING ADD SOME--". I'd like to have some nicely stated out opinions on my story. Don't be afraid to say I'm bad at writing and what I should improve. Just don't say I suck, lol. If you are to reply to the thread, please provide feedback of some sort. Or at least read it fully through.

I'd say what this story is about, but if you read the intro, that'd be better.

Bloodshed -- Prologue

They had me.

They finally had me.

After all I'd done to stop them, they had me screwed over and I had nowhere to go. Nowhere to hide, nowhere to stop them.

They could kill me off right now, or interrogate me. Either way, I'd suffer and I'd have to pay a price worse than what I already have. I'd have to pay, not only my life, but what I fought for. What I believed in. Would I allow it to end like this? No, if I had the strength or power to. Which I didn't. I could just not talk and try to fight the executioner, but, hell, do I honestly think that would work?

All because I refused to give them the aeternus, I'd cost everything and everyone I loved.

Wait, what am I saying? That I'd actually give them what they wanted? Everything they've done to me was just to torment me into giving them the damned weapon. They thought killing everything off from me would torment me into what they wanted. What would cost the world. But I'm better than that. Sure I wanted to see my family again. Sure my friends. Sure everything I loved. But I've got Bryan by me all the way, and I know that. He may be in a different cell, but we've got each other. In no way will these maggots stop me from accomplishing what I came for.

Revenge.

But let's skip to the good part, the beginning. Where my adventure hadn't even begun.

I'm Lance Desmond, I'm 16, and this is my story.

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So, how did you think the intro was? It's not supposed to be impressive, more like suspenseful. I'm gonna be writing more and more, and try to be more impressive. But this is the intro. The last part where he reveals himself is my first name and age, actually. Last name is just one I made up on the spot. This story should evolve well, but who knows?

Feedback would be awesome, or ideas for the story itself.