Ok, so the other thread I made must have glitched so I am just going to try to remake it (assuming this is allowed)
The good thing is, I just Copy Pasted this from my hotmail, where I originally typed it.


I had to write this for Drama class. It's supposed to be a more modern version of Snow White.

I just want some feedback, suggestions, and opinions on it. also to point out grammar mistakes and flaws.



Narrator 1(1)

Narrator 2(2)

Seth(S)

Witch(W)

Dwarfs(D) (All played by one person)

Servant(M)

Mayor(B)

Neighbor mayor's son(C)




1: In a far away land with lucious green grass where flowers of all
colours bloomed and butterflies could flutter along without a care in
the world called Texas.


And in Texas there is a prosperous town that was the perfect size, not too big, not too small.


2: And in that town, the mayor's wife was the smartest in all the land. And she loved to be reminded of it.





W:Bring me my magic 8 ball, Servant!


M: H-here you go.


W: Magic 8 ball, oh, Magic 8 ball, who is the smartest in Texas?


W: Oh yes! I am, still! (Cackle)


1: At least, until one day, when she couldn't be reminded that.


W: Magic 8 ball, oh, magic 8 ball, who is the smartest in Texas?


W: What? Seth White? How can my own step-son do this to me?


W: Well, I guess there's only one thing I can do...





2: A few hours later, Seth White was preparing for the marriage of a close relative.


S: Hmm, hmm, I'm so pretty.


(Crack noise)


S: Why does the mirror always break while I'm doing my makeup? It doesn't make any sense!


1: Then arrived Seth's chauffeur.


 M: Hello Seth, I'm here to take you to the wedding. Are you ready?


S: Yup! (Goes with chauffeur)


1: Little did he know, the chauffeur was actually the witch's servant in
disguise, and he was planning on drugging Seth and bringing him to the
woods to murder him!


S: (Snoring) (quietly) Bill Nye the science guy, Science rules!


M: Oh, I don't have the heart to murder this kid out of cold blood. Ugh, that evil witch is going to kill me!





2: A few hours later, Seth awoke surrounded by 7 dwarfs.


D: (Doc) Who are you? (Happy) Why are you here? (Dopey) Are you dead? (Sneezey) Achoo!


S: What? No! I was drugged and left here by a guy who probably hasn't washed his hands since christmas.


D: (Doc) That's not healthy...


S: I know, right?


S: Hey wait a second, you look like dwarfs! You know, magical creatures
who usually live in mountains, and are normally associated with wisdom,
smithing, mining, and--


D: (Sneezes)


D: (Dopey) We like to be called Little... Uh... What's that word I'm looking for?


D: (Happy) You mean people? (Dopey) Yeah! that's the word! Little people.


S: Hey, do you have a place I can stay like an apartment, cottage, house, hut, or Te-


D: (Sneeze)


D: (Happy) Why yes we do! Follow us! (Grumpy) Do you have to invite everyone we run into in the forest? I mean, the unicorns, the goblins, and we told you that the leprechauns were only here to take our gold anyways.


D: (Happy) Well... yes, I kind of did.





1: And so, Seth White got to meet his new friends. They were named: Doc,
Grumpy, Happy, Sleepy, Bashful, Sneezy and Dopey, and each one was
named after what they were good at.


2: However, trouble was stirring in the town.


W: After I'm done making this potion, We'll see who is the smartest in Texas.


W: (Sniff) Hmm, yes just about done, I'll just add a little extra stupidity for good measure.


W: Servant! Come here, I'm in need of a taste tester. (Cackle)





2: We know return to Seth White and the seven Little people as the little people are leaving to their work.


D: Good bye Seth! We'll be back in a few hours. Remember, don't open up
the doors of the cottage to anyone, many evil animals and homeless
people live in these woods.


S: Okay, bye!


1: Meanwhile, the witch had dressed herself up as a kind old lady, and watched as the little people left the cottage.


-knock knock-


S: Hello? Who's there?


W: Why it's me, a kind old lady selling some sandwiches. Would you like one?


S: Well... I guess. How much are they?


W: Let's make the first one on the house.


2o Seth White, the poor soul, took a bite of the sandwich and -Seth falls on the ground- fell fast asleep. (Snores)





1: Luckily, the mayor of another prosperous town's son happened to be
hunting in the area and spotted the cottage of his old friends, the
dwarfs, and thought he'd stop by for a bite to eat.


-Slap slap-


C: Wake up! You look like you need to see a doctor!


S: Ooh, pretty hair...


C: My god, your an idiot!


S: Dat not very nice...


C: Who are you, what's your name?


S: I'm Seth, the mayor's son!


C: Hmm, I need to get you home!


2: So Charming brought Seth home to his dad, who had been worried sick about him.





B: What happened to him? He used to be so smart.


S: Durr!


C: I don't know, but I think your wife had something to do with it.


B: What makes you think that?


C: Well, all the evidence points to her. First of all, she used to be
the smartest person in the whole state, until Seth took over. Then, your
lead detectives finger printed the basket of sandwiches left at the
cottage, and the prints matched. Also, The potion swabbed from the
sandwich and the gunk at the bottom of your cooking pots matched
completely.


B: I don't believe it!





1: And so, here is the end.


2: Fortunatly, the potion wore off in just a few days, and Seth White grew up to be a very successful inventor.


1: The wicked witch was sentenced to death by the wonderful state of
Texas for attempted murder, sabotage, and a bunch of other crimes not
mentioned in the story.


2: The 7 little people lived out the rest of their lives in the cottage, mining gold from the mountain each day.


And they all lived happily ever after (Except the witch) THE END