nice job brother . really well written . i enjoyed it very much.

Hey Brain! It's nice to see you've attempted a review, and you've put a lot of work into it!  Since you wanted my opinion, here is my critical feedback. Don't take it too hard... it's only meant to help you improve!

1. I think you wrote this somewhere else and then copy pasted it here?  I say that because the formatting is all messed up, and this problem usually occurs when you paste content into vizzed.  For example, many of your lines are broken  between multiple lines when they shouldn't be.  (i.e.  "Hello folks. This is a review of Destiny of an Emperor 2 and is also my first so" on one line... then the rest of that sentence on the next line.)

2.  I see that you rated each category, but I'd suggest an adjustment.  Either move those ratings to the top of your review so people immediately know how you felt, or split the review into sections. List each category and rating, then ONLY talk about that category under that rating. For example:

Graphics : 8.2 out of 10.
I liked the graphics because...

Sound: 7.6 out of 10.
I didn't rate the sounds that high because...

3.I liked most of what you had to say, but I felt like a lot of it described aspects of the game instead of listing its strengths, weaknesses, attractions, and put offs. I think this is because you talked about many features without saying if you liked them or not. Why did you feel the way you did on certain issues?

I think that's all the feedback I really have. You did a really great job, so don't think my feedback means I wasn't impressed!  Good luck on future reviews (if you plan on completing more)!

Brain-Splattered : I am a huge fan of the War of the 3 Kingdoms, so this was a delight to read. I can see what Singelli is saying, and I succumb to using that approach alot as its the universal accepted way, but I like your approach is not so cookie-cutter.  The ratings are there, and that looks fine to me. Formatting might be a little funky, but its a good review!

Singelli : Hey thank you for the feedback. Yeah my first and maybe my last because I can tell I am not much for structured writing. I prefer freeform as you can tell because I use a text file on my computer ( saved in a folder in my documents ). That would be why it is so choppy and out of whack. If everyone thinks they are too off or messed up to read and enjoy then let me know ( so I can spare y'all my amateurish attempts ). Don't get me wrong I ain't being pissy about it or anything. Just doing this for fun because I felt like trying one to see if I could. I moved the ratings up like you said. I'll look at it and see what I feel like changing around and seeing if I can clean it up. Pretty much done with it for now because I am tired of altering and rewriting it. Been working on that for about 10 days and going cross eyed looking at it ... know what I mean ? I just tried to keep it broken up so it wasn't all big long boring stretches like some of my post you have told me about that I do. Oh and by the way no offense was taken ... seriously ... thanks for the review. I'll work on it as I can later on. :O)

Brain-Splattered :

Good review - in the future I'd break down the review a little more into different sections (ex. reviewing graphics, gameplay, music etc) instead of lumping it altogether into one big paragraph - it makes it easier to spot the key points.

Nice review! Really good for your first one . You used a lot of descriptive words and summed the game up pretty well. Although, like Ace102 said, I would break it down into sections, like gameplay, music, plot, etc. Whenever I write a review, I do it like this:

OVERALL: 10

introduction

Story 9
description

sound: 8
description

Graphics: 7
description

addictiveness 6

Depth: 5
description

Difficulty: 4
description


Conclusion

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That's how i do it. Of course, you don't have to follow it that way, but it's a suggestion. You should do it the way you want.