Once again I wrote a poem for my creative writing class. It was originally going to be a funny poem but thoughts popping up in my head changed everything. I hope this post doesn't include a layout, but I couldn't check on my profile for some reason so if it does, I'm sorry.

Once there was a dude named Dude
Dude was always hungry; the dude highly valued his food
Dude didn’t do donut; the dude bought big bags of brussel sprout
Dude crunched chips loudly; the dude quickly ran out

There was a dude named Dude
Dude wasn’t very nice; the dude was rude
Dude bullied and cursed; the dude was the worst
When Dude was in a mood, the dude just burst

But it wasn’t Dude who made himself this way
It was Dude’s classmates who led Dude astray
Because, you see, they had been bullies too
Making fun of everything Dude would do

If Dude raised his hand, they would chuckle
If Dude told them to stop, they’d whip him with a belt buckle
If Dude refused to join them, they’d stuff him into a locker
If Dude dared to talk to a girl, they’d go up and mock her

Now all Dude has is his Mom and Dad
Because everyone Dude met, including himself, turned bad
Even though Dude’s now a bully at school
Dude and his parents are still cool

But wait, that’s Dude walking up to me, oh my!
He looks like he’s about to cry
“You seem nice, can you help me?” he asks
“Dude! Yes I can. It’s OK if it’s a bunch of hard tasks.”

So what we talked about next changed our lives for the better
He got to know me a little more so I could be his mentor
My name is Samuel and I can gladly say
He completely stopped his bullying that day

Just because I was myself, Dude trusted me with all
Just because I was myself, I saved him from his fall
Before meeting him, I was struggling a lot too
I had no true friends either, I felt a little blue

But my past was different from his most of the time
When I was sad or angry, I hid my emotions deep inside
I gave away things I had so others could notice me
However, I was quiet, short, and hard for others to see

It’s beautiful when two worlds collide
And someone joins me on this rough ride
It’s like lifting a ton off my shoulder
Which was not an effective boulder holder

It’s currently a month later
I got a party invitation from Dude on paper
He invited all the new, true blue friends we just made
I can’t wait to see more that will make our past fade

Very well done, Pac! I liked this poem a lot. I hope you got an A for this.

Nice poem, man. I really liked this one because it showed the human side to the bully instead of just painting him as a monster like everyone else tries to do. EVERYONE does what they do for a reason, and maybe if we saw those reasons, we wouldn't judge the bullies quite so harshly.

At the same time it didn't indemnify the bully, which is a nice touch. And that in the end we saw that the pushover kid and bully were both the way they were for similar reasons, did a good job illustrating just how similar we all are deep down inside. We fight and vilify one another, we argue, attack, and hurt one another, but if we could all really see that we're all the same and that the only difference is how we handle those situations, the world would be a much better place. Right is right, and wrong is wrong, but there are reasons behind those actions and they should be considered just as much as the actions themselves.


I hope you continue sharing your writing with us -- I always enjoy them it seems.

Good job on the poem, Pacman+Mariofan! =) I liked how you used couplets throughout the entire poem for a poem about friendship, since in this case, it kind of feels like you were creating a dialogue between 2 people that appear to be on opposite sides of a fence, but that were actually still connected (as shown by the rhyming schemes). Then, since that dialogue and rhyming scheme persisted in the same way until the very end, it's as if you're hinting that the relationship was able to endure through/withstand the rough patches and trials of time, even though the lines mentioned how the two of you were able to change from being distant observers of each other to actual friends. When one thinks about that in conjunction with the title of your poem, "A Rhyme Against Bullying," we get the sense that you're trying to convey how despite everything that was going wrong for the two of you (bullying and being bullied), you were able to keep marching on steadily and even now, when you've made a decision to stop allowing yourself to be involved with any more bullying, you're still carrying on the resistance against bullying.

In other words, well done, and thank you very much for sharing this poem to inspire us to band together to continue on against bullying, because there is still a future for everyone as long as we decide to change our lives and keep on moving to let the past fade. Certainly, we will never forget what's already happened, but we can still change the course of our lives so that the ending to our stories will be much happier than what we had to start with. =)

I must admit, I really did enjoy this rhyme. Even though I never had been on either side of such a thing myself while at school, I do get the feeling of how Dude and Samuel feel as I read the rhyme.

And it rhymes well, as well.

...I can't really say much more about this, but good job.