Hello, this is my first chapter of my first story, Warrior Jake: The Story - Chapter 1: A new warrior
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The Lombry is a race with 2 planets, good and evil.
The good Lombry race learn to fight and defend.
Evil Lombries live far away from the good Lombries.
Maybe a million miles differences between the 2 planets, making the good lombries save, but the Evil Lombries are smarter in technologically, making them have very fast space ships, to arrive to the Good Lombries in a week..
But one day, a new kid was born, and he was sent to a city, before being sent, a message in his space ship, saying 'If he grows up and asks about his past, tell him the truth, he will be ready. We will see if you lie, I hope, but please, tell him the truth.. And please, keep this message..'
When he was sent to earth, he got named 'Jake'.
When he was 8, his friend Robby, asked questions..

Robby: Hey Jake, I have a question
Jake: And I'ma answer it, question is?
Robby: Do yo believe in Aliens?
Jake: No, I don't, I guess, why?
Robby: Well... You look different then the othe-.
Jake: Of course, everyone looks different then everyone.
Robby: Not in that way, you never have been blooding, but today, something stabbed you, it's the first time we've seen you blooding, but the blood was black...
Jake: Yeah, so?
Robby: Well, normal blood is red, not black, and your eyes, it's black, but dark black, it's never been seen...
Jake: So what you are thinking is that I am a alien?
Robby: Well, sort of, but one more thing, you are the weakest in our class, but one time... You got sad and very mad, you just got stronger then that bully, and he is the strongest... He trains every day, and you didn't train and became stronger then him for a second...
Jake: Okay, you're making me curious...
Robby: Have you ever seen any pictures of you very young? No, are you immature? In a way, no. You are only 8, I am 12, and you are more mature then I am..
Jake: Just go to bed.
Robby: And about your blood, it is unknown blood..
Jake: I said go to bed...
Robby: We are in bed. It's night time.
Jake: You aren't in bed, you're still standing.
Robby: Whatever.

After the conversation, Jake was curious about it, so when he was home after the trip, he searched for any pictures of him being young, but he found something... A letter.. A very well hidden letter..
Jake asked his mom about his past..
She replied:

Mom: Uhh.. I.. Uhh.. I.. Am your mom..
Jake: Don't fool around. I want to know everything, my past, and how I was born, who my mother and father is, everything.
Mom: I am your mom!
Jake: Just tell me I am ready! Didn't you read that letter?! I found a letter hidden somewhere! And it said I will be ready, and I do feel ready!!
Mom: Alright.. I.. uhh... I can't really... Tell...

When a Guard woke up and went to see whats happening with Jake, he found out Isabelle doesn't want to tell the truth, so he went to the newly created spaceship, and and is heading for Earth.

Jake: Just tell it! I want to know, am I a alien or not?
Isabelle: But... We don't know...
Jake: Look at my black eye, black blood, black hair, it isn't normal! My hair is very darkish black!
Isabelle: You have black blood?
Jake: Yes.
Isabelle: I really don't know...

It only took the Guard 5 minutes to go to Earth, Earth and Lombry is close to each other, and with the new high speed SpaceShip, it takes him 5 minutes!
Guard: Woaw.. Impressive... That's a new record..
He went to the house of Jake.

*Knock knock*
Isabelle walks to the door and yells 'WHAT'
Guard: Calm down, didn't you read the letter, it said that Jake would be ready, it said to tell him the truth, but you didn't listen. His first real name was Darrish, but we decided to change it to Jake, because Darrish isn't a Earth name, and it was the weirdest name found out on our planet.
Isabelle: Wh- What...
Guard: Jake, you are a alien, yes, but you are strong inside you, deep hidden within you, when we sent baby Lombries to other planets, when landed, you will have the normal power of that planet. But deep hidden within you, you can have your normal strenth, as what happened when someone nearly killed someone...
Jake: So it is true...
Guard: Sorry, I didn't say my name, my name is Flinn, I am a guard, I was watching you your whole live.
Jake: I want to know more, what am I, and why is my blood black?
Flinn: You are from the planet Lombry, you are a Lombry. Most Lombries has Dark Black hair, Black Eyes and Black blood. We have fought a lot, and have been trying to save the planet many times, the worst one was when a white guy named Frieza tried to kill everyone on our planet.. Bu we could defend ourselves. We are strong.
Jake: So I am from a fighting planet?
Flinn: Yes, our planet has been split apart into 2 planets, good and evil... It is known as a legend, but we aren't sure if it is true. It happened 2000-3000 years ago.
Jake: That is actually possible? And how would it help?
Flinn: We aren't exactly allowed to talk about it, everyone knows about it, but most of us thinks it's a legend, a thing that isn't true, but I don't think it's a legend..
Isabelle: Uh hello?? I'm still here?
Flinn: Isabelle, thanks for taking care of Jake, the reason he got sent away is that he needed to get out of the planet, a lot of baby Lombries were sent away, we thought the planet was gonna explode, but it didn't happen, thankfully...
Jake: Wait what does that mean?
Flinn: I have a question, do you like fighting?
Jake: I like fighting but when training, it doesn't help... I wish I could become stronger..
Flinn: That is because you aren't used to the fighting ways of how you need to train, you don't know how, so you can't become stronger..
Jake: So I have to go to my home planet and train there to become stronger?
Flinn: If you train a bit on Planet Lombry, you'll get used to it fast, and you'll know how to train then, then you can go back to Earth if you want to..
Jake: I think I'm going with you..
Isabelle: Oh no no no NO! You are not going anywhere!!
Flinn: I have more control over him then you, you know? Let him go, okay?
Isabelle: Fine, if you come back, fine. Go ahead, abandon me, not caring for me.
Jake: Sorry I just need to train, if I don't train, I'll stay useless, I have difficulties with my backpack for school..
Flinn: You'll become stronger, trust me. Right this way, sir.
Jake, Flinn and Isabelle goes outside.
Jake: Woaaaw, that's your ship?
Flinn: Yeah, let me open it.
The door of the ship automatically opened, Jake and Flinn went inside, and Jake said goodbye to Isabelle, he forgot to say goodbye to his friends.

5 minutes later they arrived to Planet Lombry, when Jake went outside, he fell down, he could hardly stand...
Jake: HOW DO I STAND HERE?!
Flinn: Don't worry, the gravity is just 5 times gravity on earth, I could feel that.
Jake: Yeah I understand why I was so weak now
Flinn: don't worry, you'll get used to it, here, take my hands.
Jake tried to get the hands of Flinn, and tried to walk, he was crouching the whole way, and a lot of Lomries was looking at him thinking why he walks like that, some of the knew why, most of them didn't.
Flinn: This here is a Elite fighting school, I don't think you'll be able to handle it
Jake: Oh god... I want to... This... Gravity... I hate... It...
Flinn: Try to stand, and jump.
It took Jake 5 minutes to stand, and he started jumping, after 2 jumps he fell, so he tried again, it took him 2 minutes this time to get up, then he jumps 20-30 times and then he had no problem with standing
Jake: Woaw was that training?
Flinn: Nope, it just makes you used to the gravity.
Jake: I want to go the the elite school, I'll take the challenge.
Flinn: Alright, but you won't like it, you're only 8. I'll set you on the first class to begin with.
Jake: Alrighty, I'm gonna do my best. Where do I need to sleep?
Flinn: You'll be sleeping at the Elite school.
Jake: Okay, so what do I need to do know?
Flinn: Follow me.
Jake and Flinn went both to the Elite School. And that is when the story begins.

~To be continued~

For my next chapter, I'll accept any advice you can give me, so if it is possible, I don't mind any advice This is my first time after all, right?

James! Good story man, I have one point of advice though. First of all, how did 'Isabelle' come into the story? Who is she? Second of all, I assume the guard is a Lombry but you didn't say that. But the rest of the story was very good, let's see how the Elite school will be!

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