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The tales of Wanted dead Zed . Chapter 1 :D
09-27-13 05:59 PM
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Ok this is book two of my story . It is also chapter 1 of book two . Enjoy Day : Zed and his crew ( And by crew I mean everyone on board his ship ) Are sailing happily through out the world . Nothing to worry about or get afraid of . Just the sea breeze and a wide , blue , watery , road known as the sea to sail upon . Yes sir . Life couldn't be better for the Captain . Zed - " Ahh . This is the life Ehh Mr . Luke ? " Luke - " Aye sir " Zed - " Yup . The fresh open air . This nice ship with attachments of a monster . That pile of gold we took from that ship which was sinking . And most importantly .... Amy- * Blushes * Zed- " Rum !! " Amy - * Face dampens * Zed - " Nothing could ruin this life " * Starts drinking his fifth bottle of rum * Matthew - " Um .. Sir . There be a black spot in the water . " Zed - * Spits out rum * " Did you just say Black Spot ? " Matthew - " Aye sir. I did just say Black Spot " Zed - " Of course you did . Ok . It seems that the good days are past us . . I think Death himself may be paying us a little visit " ( Listen to this until I say to stop ) : http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uVAy2uOpA0E . The sky around The Unlucky Charm ( Zed's ship ) From the Black spot , arose a skull. Underneath the skull , a pole . And Underneath the pole , A ship . The Reaper's Bride . And its captain . The Reaper of the Seas himself ... Captain Dedmond . A flash of lightening struck and Dedmond was teleported to Zed's ship . ( You can stop listening to the theme now ) . Dedmond - " Zed . " Zed - " Dedmond " Dedmond - " The map " Zed - " What map ? " Dedmond - " The one that secured your safety through my waters " Zed - " Ohh . That map . Why didn't you say so ? " Dedmond - " You don't have the map . Do you ? " Zed - " Well would you beleive ... that I was just on my way to get it ? Yes . It is located somewhere on an island ... on earth . " Dedmond - " THats it . I am going to kill you where you stand !!!! . * Draws sword * Zed - " * Draws sword * Now lets not do anything we might regret here now " Dedmond - " What have you got to loose ? " Zed - " My life and ship and .. rum " Dedmond - " Exactly " . Zed - " I don't get it ? " Dedmond - " KILL THEM . KILL THEM ALL !!!! " Dedmond's crew of skeletons swing over onto Zed's ship . Drawing their swords . Zed's crew also draws their swords and get ready to fight . SWORDFIGHT : * While the crews begin to fight Zed and Dedmond kick it off . Zed swings at the Head of the captain . Dedmond blocks with his sword and counter attacks and swings his blade at Zed's stomach . Zed dodges . Dedmond then swings at Zeds face repeatedly but Zed blocks then dodges then blocks then dodges then dodges then blocks then swing at Dedmond's chest . The swing barely scraped off some of the rotten flesh of which the dead captain was compiled of . Zed swings his sword right but Dedmond blocks . Then he swings it to the left then Dedmond blocks . Zed then walks backwards until he stops at a wall unexpectedly . Dedmond - " Gothca !! " Dedmond thrusts his blade at Zed's heart but the captain ducks and barrel rolls between Dedmonds legs to escape. Dedmond's sword is stuck in the wall . Zed - " Haha " Meanwhile a skeleton accidentally cuts the rope which holds up a canon . The canon falls on a baord set flat over a barrel of rum . On the other end of the board was a single bottle of rum which then flies into the air towards Zed . ( All of the ship stop fighting and watch the scenario unfold ) The rum starts to decend and is going to falls . Zed drops his sword and catches the bottle . Zed - " Whew . Close one " Zed turns around only to find the blade of Dedmond in his face . Dedmond Swings at Zed's belly and Zed steps backwards , loses his balance , and falls on the floor . Dedmond Points sword at Zed . Dedmond - " Now you die !! " Zed - " Wait !! . I know I am supposed to get you the map and I am a bit late but would you rather have all the money and gold lost and hidden for ages . Or would you rather kill one lousy scrawny dusty ... Amy - " Untrustworthy " Matthew - " Kind of cruel " Luke - " Selfish " Zed - " Ok I think he gets it . What I am trying to say is that you could kill me or you could not kill me and get all the gold and money , furtunes untold from Atlantis . Just think about it . Captain Dedmond . Discoverer of the Lost City Of Atlantis " have no use for fame or fortune . The one thing I loved was lost long ago . And you will help fill the gap " Zed - " But what if there was a way to bring her back ? " Dedmond - " You are lying . Like you always do . " Zed - " Nope . Not lying . No sir ree . Dedmond - " Elaborate " Zed - " There is a jewel . It has the ability to bring back things that were lost from the heart of those who touch it . You can get it but only if you let me get a map to it . And I can't do that if I am forever trapped inside your .. sword . " Dedmond - " Fine . But be warned . Cross me again and I will Kill you " Zed - " Of course you will " The holes were Dedmond's eyes are supposed to be start to grow . The sword in his hand starts to glow as well and Dedmond thrusts his sword into the belly of Zed . Carving out out a skull in his belly . Using the Sword as a writing utensil . He also marks around Zed's body . This did not kill him but secured a seal with The Captain . Dedmond withdraws his sword . Dedmond - " Within Ten days the captain of this ship will die in this spot . And his soul will be immediately transported to my blade . But if he delivers the item in question to me then the seal is broken . Within these ten days the captain shall not face death unless it be by my sword . You have Ten days Zed " A flash of lightening strikes and the captain is telelported back to his ship . Zed gets up and shakes him self off . Zed - " That was a close one " Matthew - " Well you seem quite happy for a man who has ten days to live . " Zed - " I prefer to think of it as ten days of adventure and rum . * Opens bottle of rum he saved from falling and starts drinking it * John - " Where too Captain ? " Zed - " Let me check the Map . Ok continue sailing in this direction then turn left at this fish sign here " Amy - " I hope you know what you are doing Zed " Zed - " I always know what I am doing . When I am not doing anything that is " That was long . Anyway I hope you enjoyed it . Chapter 2 coming soon Also tell me what you think of the " Swordfight thing " And do you think that The dialogue is better displayed ? Day : Zed and his crew ( And by crew I mean everyone on board his ship ) Are sailing happily through out the world . Nothing to worry about or get afraid of . Just the sea breeze and a wide , blue , watery , road known as the sea to sail upon . Yes sir . Life couldn't be better for the Captain . Zed - " Ahh . This is the life Ehh Mr . Luke ? " Luke - " Aye sir " Zed - " Yup . The fresh open air . This nice ship with attachments of a monster . That pile of gold we took from that ship which was sinking . And most importantly .... Amy- * Blushes * Zed- " Rum !! " Amy - * Face dampens * Zed - " Nothing could ruin this life " * Starts drinking his fifth bottle of rum * Matthew - " Um .. Sir . There be a black spot in the water . " Zed - * Spits out rum * " Did you just say Black Spot ? " Matthew - " Aye sir. I did just say Black Spot " Zed - " Of course you did . Ok . It seems that the good days are past us . . I think Death himself may be paying us a little visit " ( Listen to this until I say to stop ) : http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uVAy2uOpA0E . The sky around The Unlucky Charm ( Zed's ship ) From the Black spot , arose a skull. Underneath the skull , a pole . And Underneath the pole , A ship . The Reaper's Bride . And its captain . The Reaper of the Seas himself ... Captain Dedmond . A flash of lightening struck and Dedmond was teleported to Zed's ship . ( You can stop listening to the theme now ) . Dedmond - " Zed . " Zed - " Dedmond " Dedmond - " The map " Zed - " What map ? " Dedmond - " The one that secured your safety through my waters " Zed - " Ohh . That map . Why didn't you say so ? " Dedmond - " You don't have the map . Do you ? " Zed - " Well would you beleive ... that I was just on my way to get it ? Yes . It is located somewhere on an island ... on earth . " Dedmond - " THats it . I am going to kill you where you stand !!!! . * Draws sword * Zed - " * Draws sword * Now lets not do anything we might regret here now " Dedmond - " What have you got to loose ? " Zed - " My life and ship and .. rum " Dedmond - " Exactly " . Zed - " I don't get it ? " Dedmond - " KILL THEM . KILL THEM ALL !!!! " Dedmond's crew of skeletons swing over onto Zed's ship . Drawing their swords . Zed's crew also draws their swords and get ready to fight . SWORDFIGHT : * While the crews begin to fight Zed and Dedmond kick it off . Zed swings at the Head of the captain . Dedmond blocks with his sword and counter attacks and swings his blade at Zed's stomach . Zed dodges . Dedmond then swings at Zeds face repeatedly but Zed blocks then dodges then blocks then dodges then dodges then blocks then swing at Dedmond's chest . The swing barely scraped off some of the rotten flesh of which the dead captain was compiled of . Zed swings his sword right but Dedmond blocks . Then he swings it to the left then Dedmond blocks . Zed then walks backwards until he stops at a wall unexpectedly . Dedmond - " Gothca !! " Dedmond thrusts his blade at Zed's heart but the captain ducks and barrel rolls between Dedmonds legs to escape. Dedmond's sword is stuck in the wall . Zed - " Haha " Meanwhile a skeleton accidentally cuts the rope which holds up a canon . The canon falls on a baord set flat over a barrel of rum . On the other end of the board was a single bottle of rum which then flies into the air towards Zed . ( All of the ship stop fighting and watch the scenario unfold ) The rum starts to decend and is going to falls . Zed drops his sword and catches the bottle . Zed - " Whew . Close one " Zed turns around only to find the blade of Dedmond in his face . Dedmond Swings at Zed's belly and Zed steps backwards , loses his balance , and falls on the floor . Dedmond Points sword at Zed . Dedmond - " Now you die !! " Zed - " Wait !! . I know I am supposed to get you the map and I am a bit late but would you rather have all the money and gold lost and hidden for ages . Or would you rather kill one lousy scrawny dusty ... Amy - " Untrustworthy " Matthew - " Kind of cruel " Luke - " Selfish " Zed - " Ok I think he gets it . What I am trying to say is that you could kill me or you could not kill me and get all the gold and money , furtunes untold from Atlantis . Just think about it . Captain Dedmond . Discoverer of the Lost City Of Atlantis " have no use for fame or fortune . The one thing I loved was lost long ago . And you will help fill the gap " Zed - " But what if there was a way to bring her back ? " Dedmond - " You are lying . Like you always do . " Zed - " Nope . Not lying . No sir ree . Dedmond - " Elaborate " Zed - " There is a jewel . It has the ability to bring back things that were lost from the heart of those who touch it . You can get it but only if you let me get a map to it . And I can't do that if I am forever trapped inside your .. sword . " Dedmond - " Fine . But be warned . Cross me again and I will Kill you " Zed - " Of course you will " The holes were Dedmond's eyes are supposed to be start to grow . The sword in his hand starts to glow as well and Dedmond thrusts his sword into the belly of Zed . Carving out out a skull in his belly . Using the Sword as a writing utensil . He also marks around Zed's body . This did not kill him but secured a seal with The Captain . Dedmond withdraws his sword . Dedmond - " Within Ten days the captain of this ship will die in this spot . And his soul will be immediately transported to my blade . But if he delivers the item in question to me then the seal is broken . Within these ten days the captain shall not face death unless it be by my sword . You have Ten days Zed " A flash of lightening strikes and the captain is telelported back to his ship . Zed gets up and shakes him self off . Zed - " That was a close one " Matthew - " Well you seem quite happy for a man who has ten days to live . " Zed - " I prefer to think of it as ten days of adventure and rum . * Opens bottle of rum he saved from falling and starts drinking it * John - " Where too Captain ? " Zed - " Let me check the Map . Ok continue sailing in this direction then turn left at this fish sign here " Amy - " I hope you know what you are doing Zed " Zed - " I always know what I am doing . When I am not doing anything that is " That was long . Anyway I hope you enjoyed it . Chapter 2 coming soon Also tell me what you think of the " Swordfight thing " And do you think that The dialogue is better displayed ? |
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09-27-13 06:12 PM
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Mr. Zed : nice! I loved the sword fight! That was a great story captain zed! In my opinion I think you shouldn't change a thing! So keep up the good work! |
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Great writing as usual. I'm looking forward to reading more! Great writing as usual. I'm looking forward to reading more! |
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Oh, so there are two books, I am going to have to do a lot more reading today then I had originally planned on doing. Other than that, I liked the swordfight, the characters are interersting, and i like how the book is shaping. Oh, so there are two books, I am going to have to do a lot more reading today then I had originally planned on doing. Other than that, I liked the swordfight, the characters are interersting, and i like how the book is shaping. |
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