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07-06-13 10:28 AM
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Hello I did another poem people don't want me to stop with this so I have done other poem hope you enjoy it

A Poem About Every Day People

people everyday do what they do
mothers cooking dads working too
everyone wants whats best for themselves
even children during Christmas dressed as elves

working hard and earning money
its not easy like a baby's dummy
lot of people go through problem
being depressed and fall to the bottom

but people pick themselves up again
stronger before they rise without complain
doing so whats best for their family
being happy and not being nasty

business men and woman do their jobs well
work so hard sometimes hard to sell
bus takes people to their destination
some are slow people sometimes lose there patient

thank you or reading this
Hello I did another poem people don't want me to stop with this so I have done other poem hope you enjoy it

A Poem About Every Day People

people everyday do what they do
mothers cooking dads working too
everyone wants whats best for themselves
even children during Christmas dressed as elves

working hard and earning money
its not easy like a baby's dummy
lot of people go through problem
being depressed and fall to the bottom

but people pick themselves up again
stronger before they rise without complain
doing so whats best for their family
being happy and not being nasty

business men and woman do their jobs well
work so hard sometimes hard to sell
bus takes people to their destination
some are slow people sometimes lose there patient

thank you or reading this
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Nice poem as always!
Keep on making stories and poems.
Also, it rhymes!
Nice chose of words and just keep up the stories and create more characters for them.
I hope this advice is helpful.
Nice poem as always!
Keep on making stories and poems.
Also, it rhymes!
Nice chose of words and just keep up the stories and create more characters for them.
I hope this advice is helpful.
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Thanks for another poem. Very good job again! Keep it up! : D
Thanks for another poem. Very good job again! Keep it up! : D
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You're good at poetry, my friend! I also do poetry, it's just.. Uh... Darker you could say?

ANYWAYS... Keep up the good work!

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You're good at poetry, my friend! I also do poetry, it's just.. Uh... Darker you could say?

ANYWAYS... Keep up the good work!

~Sekky
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Nice poem! If you want my opinion, I think the use of punctuation may make your poem appear more attractive. Like say, your first stanza:

People everyday do what they do:
mothers cooking, dads working too.
Everyone wants what's best for themselves,
even children during Christmas, dressed as elves.

Though I'm not sure if regular grammar rules apply to poems, since I'm not an avid poem writer.
But anyways, the use of punctuation could help the readers read your poems the way you read them to yourself.
Nice poem! If you want my opinion, I think the use of punctuation may make your poem appear more attractive. Like say, your first stanza:

People everyday do what they do:
mothers cooking, dads working too.
Everyone wants what's best for themselves,
even children during Christmas, dressed as elves.

Though I'm not sure if regular grammar rules apply to poems, since I'm not an avid poem writer.
But anyways, the use of punctuation could help the readers read your poems the way you read them to yourself.
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Very good,nice to see how creative some people can be,I do some poetry now and then,I usually try to make poems rhyme and that can be difficult sometimes,anyway,I liked it
Very good,nice to see how creative some people can be,I do some poetry now and then,I usually try to make poems rhyme and that can be difficult sometimes,anyway,I liked it
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