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06-18-13 11:29 AM

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This game is amazing made in 1998 this was my first experiance with pokemon, After boworing it from a friend i spent so many hours on it. after playing yellow then red and blue it is easy to see the advancemence made to the games. Not only were the sprites re-made and enhanced, the world map seemed better aswell...(though that might just be me) the most noticeable change would be...THE PIKACHU...you know the little guy the one that follows you around throughout the game, a macanic not seen again till heart gold and soul silver...this really lead me to bond with my pikachu.

all in all this game is brilliant and i wouldnt hessetate to play again.

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06-18-13 11:40 AM

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ookamiken : Hey there! (: How are you?

I'm great.

I don't know what went wrong with your review, it says 361 words but in count it's really 118. I really don't know.

If this was your first review, well done. I appreciate your attempt at making this review. I would really say to work on your spelling, punctuation and grammar, it's not too good.

Examples: Experiance - Experience. Boworing - Borrowing.

You also made up words in your review which was actually funny and made me enjoy the review more, in a way. You were being creative in my opinion, which I like!

Example: Advancemence - Advancement

I would really go into more detail in your reviews and structure it a lot more. Break it down into these sections: Graphics, Sound, Addictiveness, Depth, Story, Difficult and Overall view of this game. It will greatly improve your review's standards and you will be complimented on it.

If you're new to reviews and need help, I can provide help below.

I use P.E.E, or PEE. It stands for Point. Evidence. Explain. Basically, you give your point and then you give a source of evidence from the game and then explain why you made this point. Using this method will tremendously improve your review.

Also, https://www.vizzed.com/boards/thread.php?id=58382 use that thread, it has many, many tips on how to improve also.

I hope you take on board what I have said and improve on it! Overall, I enjoyed reading this review. Just improve!

ookamiken : Hey there! (: How are you?

I'm great.

I don't know what went wrong with your review, it says 361 words but in count it's really 118. I really don't know.

If this was your first review, well done. I appreciate your attempt at making this review. I would really say to work on your spelling, punctuation and grammar, it's not too good.

Examples: Experiance - Experience. Boworing - Borrowing.

You also made up words in your review which was actually funny and made me enjoy the review more, in a way. You were being creative in my opinion, which I like!

Example: Advancemence - Advancement

I would really go into more detail in your reviews and structure it a lot more. Break it down into these sections: Graphics, Sound, Addictiveness, Depth, Story, Difficult and Overall view of this game. It will greatly improve your review's standards and you will be complimented on it.

If you're new to reviews and need help, I can provide help below.

I use P.E.E, or PEE. It stands for Point. Evidence. Explain. Basically, you give your point and then you give a source of evidence from the game and then explain why you made this point. Using this method will tremendously improve your review.

Also, https://www.vizzed.com/boards/thread.php?id=58382 use that thread, it has many, many tips on how to improve also.

I hope you take on board what I have said and improve on it! Overall, I enjoyed reading this review. Just improve!

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06-18-13 11:52 AM

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yeah...it seams that i have dont like a million spaces before the review LOL but thank you for you kind words ^^ and sorry for everything i dont do so good in my english class and i struggle alot...the school dosent want to help me with my dislexia so i find it very hard to cope

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06-19-13 09:05 PM

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Yeah, I think you should improve on your punctuation and spelling, just run it through with spell check and you will be fine, and try to make categories of the topics for the game, break it down and really go into depth and detail explaining it, that is what will make your reviews better and it will really make them a lot more informative about the game itself and everything about it. I hope that this helps in making your future reviews a little better. If this is a first review then I like the effort and positive attitude you put into making this review, I think you did a good job with that. If you keep on writing reviews they will get better and you will make much longer and more detailed reviews. I hope that this helps, good job and keep up the good work and keep making more reviews and trying hard!