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Memoir Norlocht
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This is actually moderately old. It's a short (very short) piece I did that was originally intended to be in two parts, but, I ah... got stuck, like I seem to have a knack for doing, and only have part one finished. Despite this, the first part works well enough standalone, and I'll point out right now that I rarely write in the first person perspective, so this is a bit of a deviation from the norm for me. Perhaps, in time, I will pick the project back up, but until then, here's a little bit I feel worthy of sharing.

Feel free to comment, ask questions, or what have you as you will. If I post any others, they also will likely be upwards of a year old due to a terrible case of an all-encompassing art block.
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It had been countless millennia since last I saw his face brimming with energy. After I found him, the memory of his features started to fade, until only the countenance of his corpse, frozen in agony and shame, remained. I had succeeded him, and in his absence, began a family, and further developed the kingdom he dreamed of and fought so hard in his life to earn, build, and achieve. Yet, in life after his had ended, I steadily felt a cold and terrible emptiness, which nothing could chase away—not a new partner, not a husband, not even a child, or a prospering empire.

I was distressed so constantly that no one ever noticed, and my old comrades from his time had forgotten it was even there. No comfort came in realizing his dream. No relief took in maintaining and furthering that dream. No solace found me in death. While I, too, was claimed by Sacred Hell, I never saw more than a glimpse of his face in passing while carrying out our duties under Arimos’ order. I was in a constant state of apprehension and disconcertion in those millennia.

While my soul retained its memories of life in vivid detail, I noticed that those of the other inhabitants about me lost theirs bit by bit, like the text of an ancient book fading away with increasing age. As I realized it was generally an inevitable occurrence in Sacred Hell, my distress only deeper rooted itself and grew. I was an anomaly there, and I was certain that he was not—our passings continued to involve little more than him catching my eye, and it was then that I realized I had no longer existed to him even before my death.

Arimos did not judge harsh upon me. My place in his realm was intended a privileged one; I had done nothing to earn eternity of his tortures. Still, I was torn into agony of my own each time I saw our commander, and there was nothing that could be done—that I would allow be done—to ease the ache that’d swallowed my soul.

Order continued in the realm undaunted, and eventually the hurt became a hind-thought as the shock and sting of my revelation lost to an encroaching aloofness. I came to reluctantly accept my lot as it were, and I went numb, becoming distant and reflexive. I stopped reacting to normal occurrences, and I stopped noticing the times I passed him by. Nothing unusual ever happened in Sacred Hell.
This is actually moderately old. It's a short (very short) piece I did that was originally intended to be in two parts, but, I ah... got stuck, like I seem to have a knack for doing, and only have part one finished. Despite this, the first part works well enough standalone, and I'll point out right now that I rarely write in the first person perspective, so this is a bit of a deviation from the norm for me. Perhaps, in time, I will pick the project back up, but until then, here's a little bit I feel worthy of sharing.

Feel free to comment, ask questions, or what have you as you will. If I post any others, they also will likely be upwards of a year old due to a terrible case of an all-encompassing art block.
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It had been countless millennia since last I saw his face brimming with energy. After I found him, the memory of his features started to fade, until only the countenance of his corpse, frozen in agony and shame, remained. I had succeeded him, and in his absence, began a family, and further developed the kingdom he dreamed of and fought so hard in his life to earn, build, and achieve. Yet, in life after his had ended, I steadily felt a cold and terrible emptiness, which nothing could chase away—not a new partner, not a husband, not even a child, or a prospering empire.

I was distressed so constantly that no one ever noticed, and my old comrades from his time had forgotten it was even there. No comfort came in realizing his dream. No relief took in maintaining and furthering that dream. No solace found me in death. While I, too, was claimed by Sacred Hell, I never saw more than a glimpse of his face in passing while carrying out our duties under Arimos’ order. I was in a constant state of apprehension and disconcertion in those millennia.

While my soul retained its memories of life in vivid detail, I noticed that those of the other inhabitants about me lost theirs bit by bit, like the text of an ancient book fading away with increasing age. As I realized it was generally an inevitable occurrence in Sacred Hell, my distress only deeper rooted itself and grew. I was an anomaly there, and I was certain that he was not—our passings continued to involve little more than him catching my eye, and it was then that I realized I had no longer existed to him even before my death.

Arimos did not judge harsh upon me. My place in his realm was intended a privileged one; I had done nothing to earn eternity of his tortures. Still, I was torn into agony of my own each time I saw our commander, and there was nothing that could be done—that I would allow be done—to ease the ache that’d swallowed my soul.

Order continued in the realm undaunted, and eventually the hurt became a hind-thought as the shock and sting of my revelation lost to an encroaching aloofness. I came to reluctantly accept my lot as it were, and I went numb, becoming distant and reflexive. I stopped reacting to normal occurrences, and I stopped noticing the times I passed him by. Nothing unusual ever happened in Sacred Hell.
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i'm surprised that no one has read this yet, but it's strange cause it doesn't have the same detail as your other work
i'm surprised that no one has read this yet, but it's strange cause it doesn't have the same detail as your other work
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I readily chalk it up to the unfamiliar and maybe dubious names I give my works. Like the newer one I posted? I'm sure almost no one really knows how to pronounce that, and a lot of people are less inclined to click on things they're not sure how to pronounce. It's unfortunate. ._. But I like giving things strange names.

The detail that you point out has a funny explanation to it; when I write in first-person, I'll often slip into character as I do it, and sometimes the way they may write something will dictate what comes out in the end. I can probably give some examples. I have another work I did in first-person that was done as a project for school that I rather liked.
I readily chalk it up to the unfamiliar and maybe dubious names I give my works. Like the newer one I posted? I'm sure almost no one really knows how to pronounce that, and a lot of people are less inclined to click on things they're not sure how to pronounce. It's unfortunate. ._. But I like giving things strange names.

The detail that you point out has a funny explanation to it; when I write in first-person, I'll often slip into character as I do it, and sometimes the way they may write something will dictate what comes out in the end. I can probably give some examples. I have another work I did in first-person that was done as a project for school that I rather liked.
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i find the names rather interesting, do they have any meaning?
and i find that it usually holds true that the stranger something is, the more worthwhile

i can see what you mean about slipping into the character cause it makes it seem that the work came from a life experience, it gives the work the feeling of realism
i find the names rather interesting, do they have any meaning?
and i find that it usually holds true that the stranger something is, the more worthwhile

i can see what you mean about slipping into the character cause it makes it seem that the work came from a life experience, it gives the work the feeling of realism
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...I can't actually remember if "Norlocht" meant anything, but "seulva'den secht'olath" translates to "waking nightmare" in a language I've been slowly piecing together for a number of years now.

It does, so long as you have some success. Sometimes I don't. n_n; My first couple of runs weren't so great, but those were years ago.
...I can't actually remember if "Norlocht" meant anything, but "seulva'den secht'olath" translates to "waking nightmare" in a language I've been slowly piecing together for a number of years now.

It does, so long as you have some success. Sometimes I don't. n_n; My first couple of runs weren't so great, but those were years ago.
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Hey nice story so did you make that or did somebody else make that?
Hey nice story so did you make that or did somebody else make that?
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Intersesting story Kai, I sort of want to read more.
It seems it could be either the beginning of a bigger story or the end of one.
Pretty good read all in all.

devonm13: I think maybe you should have read all of Kaidona's post before posting yourself and your question would be answered...
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This is actually moderately old. It's a short (very short) piece I did that was originally intended to be in two parts, but, I ah... got stuck, like I seem to have a knack for doing, and only have part one finished.
Intersesting story Kai, I sort of want to read more.
It seems it could be either the beginning of a bigger story or the end of one.
Pretty good read all in all.

devonm13: I think maybe you should have read all of Kaidona's post before posting yourself and your question would be answered...
Originally posted by Kaidona
This is actually moderately old. It's a short (very short) piece I did that was originally intended to be in two parts, but, I ah... got stuck, like I seem to have a knack for doing, and only have part one finished.
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*chuckle* Thank you. Suddenly it seems unfortunate that the second installment was only intended to be roughly the same length as the first.
*chuckle* Thank you. Suddenly it seems unfortunate that the second installment was only intended to be roughly the same length as the first.
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Originally posted by Kaidona
...I can't actually remember if "Norlocht" meant anything, but "seulva'den secht'olath" translates to "waking nightmare" in a language I've been slowly piecing together for a number of years now.

It does, so long as you have some success. Sometimes I don't. n_n; My first couple of runs weren't so great, but those were years ago.


that sounds cool, any idea how far along you are in creating the language?

i'd like to read some other stories in the first person if you have any
Originally posted by Kaidona
...I can't actually remember if "Norlocht" meant anything, but "seulva'den secht'olath" translates to "waking nightmare" in a language I've been slowly piecing together for a number of years now.

It does, so long as you have some success. Sometimes I don't. n_n; My first couple of runs weren't so great, but those were years ago.


that sounds cool, any idea how far along you are in creating the language?

i'd like to read some other stories in the first person if you have any
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Not very. I only make words as I need them. I do have some rules, but they're English-based, so they're pretty easy to follow. At least for us English-speakers. o.o

I've posted one more so far. :3 I'm a little ahead of you. *chuckle*
Not very. I only make words as I need them. I do have some rules, but they're English-based, so they're pretty easy to follow. At least for us English-speakers. o.o

I've posted one more so far. :3 I'm a little ahead of you. *chuckle*
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