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Alex's Adventure!Chapter 4.Double Trouble.
06-08-12 09:51 PM
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I made this and I have been thinking of this for a long time. Characters Alex Alex's Mother Juniper Chapter 1.The big day. [Alex's Mother]Alex!Wake up! [Alex ] No! [Alex's Mother]You have to!You have to get your Pokemon! [Alex] Oh man!Your right!*jumps out of bed and gets her cloths**runs to her mom* [Alex's Mother]Are you ready? [Alex] Yes!I'm ready! [Alex's Mother]Be careful. [Alex] I will!Don't worry. [Alex's Mother]Ok.Bye! [Alex ] Bye! At the Pokemon Lab... [Alex ] Juniper!I'm here! [Juniper]Where have you been? [Alex ] I'm sorry.I over slept. [Juniper]Well,Choose your starter.Oshawott,Tepig,or Snivy? [Alex]Umm...I choose... End of Chapter 1. Preview of Chapter 2 [Alex ] I'm so happy.Oh hey Rebecca! [Rebecca]Hey Alex.I see you got your starter. [Alex]Yes I did.Hey,do you want to battle? [Rebacca]Yeah sure!We can get a chance to know each other's strengths. [Alex] Great!Bring it on! End of preview. I don't know when this will be updated.Maybe every week.On Thursdays or Fridays.So,Tell me how you liked it! I know that all of the Alex are lighter then every other name,its because I messed up.I hope I don't make that mistake again Characters Alex Alex's Mother Juniper Chapter 1.The big day. [Alex's Mother]Alex!Wake up! [Alex ] No! [Alex's Mother]You have to!You have to get your Pokemon! [Alex] Oh man!Your right!*jumps out of bed and gets her cloths**runs to her mom* [Alex's Mother]Are you ready? [Alex] Yes!I'm ready! [Alex's Mother]Be careful. [Alex] I will!Don't worry. [Alex's Mother]Ok.Bye! [Alex ] Bye! At the Pokemon Lab... [Alex ] Juniper!I'm here! [Juniper]Where have you been? [Alex ] I'm sorry.I over slept. [Juniper]Well,Choose your starter.Oshawott,Tepig,or Snivy? [Alex]Umm...I choose... End of Chapter 1. Preview of Chapter 2 [Alex ] I'm so happy.Oh hey Rebecca! [Rebecca]Hey Alex.I see you got your starter. [Alex]Yes I did.Hey,do you want to battle? [Rebacca]Yeah sure!We can get a chance to know each other's strengths. [Alex] Great!Bring it on! End of preview. I don't know when this will be updated.Maybe every week.On Thursdays or Fridays.So,Tell me how you liked it! I know that all of the Alex are lighter then every other name,its because I messed up.I hope I don't make that mistake again |
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That was a ok start. You accidently summoned Alex 11 times. 
The secret trick is to make huge stories and put the name in brackets so you don't accidently summon someone. That is what I have to say so far.
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The start isn't all that. It is similar to the beginning of many normal stories. Although, the preview of chapter two is awesome. Keep up the awesome work, Giegas. |
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Ok sorry for the long wait so I'm going to update this every 2 days so you won't have a long wait. Characters Alex Rebecca Juniper Mysterious Man Alex's Pokemon Rebecca's Pokemon Houndour[Mysterious Man's Pokemon] Ok lets start!I'm very excited to read this to you. Chapter 2.A very big battle. [Alex]Um,I choose...Oshawott! [Juniper]Oshawott?Good choice. [Alex]Its looks so cute! [Juniper]Bye! [Alex]Bye! At route 1.. [Alex]I'm so excited!Oh hey Rebecca! [Rebecca]Hey Alex.I see you got your starter. [Alex]Yes I did.Hey do you want to battle? [Rebecca]Sure!We can get a chance to learn each other's strengths. [Alex]Great!Bring It on! Battle start Alex sent out Oshawott lvl 5 HP 54/54 Rebecca sent out Snivy lvl 6 HP 63/63 Oshawott used Scratch! 6 damage! 54/63 Snivy used Vine Whip!Super effective! 24 damage! 30/54 Oshawott used Water Gun!Its not very Effective.Critical Hit! 37 damage! 17/63 Snivy used Tackle! 7 damage! 23/54 Oshawott used Water Gun!Its not very effective. 19 damage!Snivy has fainted. Oshawott gained 49 experience.Oshawott grew to level 6! Battle end [Alex]Wow!My first battle.And you already trained your Snivy? [Rebecca]Yeah,I had some time so I made the best of it. *glass breaks* [Alex]What was that? [Rebecca]I don't know.Lets go see! *both run to where they heard the glass break* [Alex]Look!A man with a bag is running away. [Rebecca]I think its a robbery! [Alex]Lets get him! [Mysterious Man]We did it Houndour!We did it! [Alex]Stop right there! [Mysterious Man]I don't think so!Houndour!Use Smog! [Houndour]Bow wow!(You got it boss!) *blasts a cloud of pitch black smoke* [Alex]He got away.... End chapter 2. I will update this sooner for you guys.I work really hard on this one. Characters Alex Rebecca Juniper Mysterious Man Alex's Pokemon Rebecca's Pokemon Houndour[Mysterious Man's Pokemon] Ok lets start!I'm very excited to read this to you. Chapter 2.A very big battle. [Alex]Um,I choose...Oshawott! [Juniper]Oshawott?Good choice. [Alex]Its looks so cute! [Juniper]Bye! [Alex]Bye! At route 1.. [Alex]I'm so excited!Oh hey Rebecca! [Rebecca]Hey Alex.I see you got your starter. [Alex]Yes I did.Hey do you want to battle? [Rebecca]Sure!We can get a chance to learn each other's strengths. [Alex]Great!Bring It on! Battle start Alex sent out Oshawott lvl 5 HP 54/54 Rebecca sent out Snivy lvl 6 HP 63/63 Oshawott used Scratch! 6 damage! 54/63 Snivy used Vine Whip!Super effective! 24 damage! 30/54 Oshawott used Water Gun!Its not very Effective.Critical Hit! 37 damage! 17/63 Snivy used Tackle! 7 damage! 23/54 Oshawott used Water Gun!Its not very effective. 19 damage!Snivy has fainted. Oshawott gained 49 experience.Oshawott grew to level 6! Battle end [Alex]Wow!My first battle.And you already trained your Snivy? [Rebecca]Yeah,I had some time so I made the best of it. *glass breaks* [Alex]What was that? [Rebecca]I don't know.Lets go see! *both run to where they heard the glass break* [Alex]Look!A man with a bag is running away. [Rebecca]I think its a robbery! [Alex]Lets get him! [Mysterious Man]We did it Houndour!We did it! [Alex]Stop right there! [Mysterious Man]I don't think so!Houndour!Use Smog! [Houndour]Bow wow!(You got it boss!) *blasts a cloud of pitch black smoke* [Alex]He got away.... End chapter 2. I will update this sooner for you guys.I work really hard on this one. |
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Good chapter, I did notice that there was only 1 houndour line, which seems kind of weird to me. Other than that, pretty good chapter, this might turn into a good story.
Giegas : Also, how many chapters will this be? ProGamer135 : This is Giegas' first story, and it is turning out good right now. Also, do you want to check out my pokemon story about myself and my story about ash's past and fighting trainers? It would be awesome if you would. Giegas : Also, how many chapters will this be? ProGamer135 : This is Giegas' first story, and it is turning out good right now. Also, do you want to check out my pokemon story about myself and my story about ash's past and fighting trainers? It would be awesome if you would. |
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The story seems to be processing better, now. |
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Giegas : Here is a post so you can post chapter 3.  Also, 14-16 chapters would make a interesting story, like mine when I had 5, then in the sequel, I had 10. Also, 14-16 chapters would make a interesting story, like mine when I had 5, then in the sequel, I had 10. |
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Time for Chapter 3! Characters Alex Oshawott Rebecca Nurse Joy Wild Pidove Chapter 3.A new addition. [Alex]This is terrible! [Rebecca]Lets go check inside! Inside the Pokemon Center... [Alex]Nurse Joy!Are you ok? [Nurse Joy]I'm fine,but that man stole all are Pokemon! [Rebecca]Don't worry,we can get them back! [Nurse Joy]Really? [Alex]Yeah!We'll show that man whose boss! [Nurse Joy]Great!I saw him go up north. [Alex]Thanks!Bye! At route 2.... [Rebecca]Man,where is he? [Alex]Maybe he got away. [Rebecca]Look!A Pokemon! [Alex]Yeah thats a Pidove!I'm gonna catch it!Go Oshawott! [Oshawott]Osha osha!(I'm ready to fight!) [Wild Pidove]Pi pidove!(Bring it on!You can't beat me!) Wild Pidove (lvl 4 HP 27/27) Appeared! Alex sent out Oshawott!(lvl 6 HP 60/60) Battle Start Oshawott used Water Gun!Critical Hit! 23 damage!(HP 4/27) Wild Pidove used Gust! Oshawott dodged it! Alex threw a Poke Ball! 1...2...3...Pidove was caught! Battle End [Alex]Alright!I caught Pidove! [Oshawott]Oshawott wott!(Yay!A new friend!) [Rebecca]Maybe Pidove can look by air. [Alex]Yeah let me sent him out.Go Pidove! [Pidove]Pi pidove!(Whatcha need?) [Alex]Pidove,I need you to fly up and look for a man with a Houndour ok? [Pidove]Pidove!(Ok!) End Chapter 3. Like always,I'll update this in 2 days.And I hope you liked this chapter! Characters Alex Oshawott Rebecca Nurse Joy Wild Pidove Chapter 3.A new addition. [Alex]This is terrible! [Rebecca]Lets go check inside! Inside the Pokemon Center... [Alex]Nurse Joy!Are you ok? [Nurse Joy]I'm fine,but that man stole all are Pokemon! [Rebecca]Don't worry,we can get them back! [Nurse Joy]Really? [Alex]Yeah!We'll show that man whose boss! [Nurse Joy]Great!I saw him go up north. [Alex]Thanks!Bye! At route 2.... [Rebecca]Man,where is he? [Alex]Maybe he got away. [Rebecca]Look!A Pokemon! [Alex]Yeah thats a Pidove!I'm gonna catch it!Go Oshawott! [Oshawott]Osha osha!(I'm ready to fight!) [Wild Pidove]Pi pidove!(Bring it on!You can't beat me!) Wild Pidove (lvl 4 HP 27/27) Appeared! Alex sent out Oshawott!(lvl 6 HP 60/60) Battle Start Oshawott used Water Gun!Critical Hit! 23 damage!(HP 4/27) Wild Pidove used Gust! Oshawott dodged it! Alex threw a Poke Ball! 1...2...3...Pidove was caught! Battle End [Alex]Alright!I caught Pidove! [Oshawott]Oshawott wott!(Yay!A new friend!) [Rebecca]Maybe Pidove can look by air. [Alex]Yeah let me sent him out.Go Pidove! [Pidove]Pi pidove!(Whatcha need?) [Alex]Pidove,I need you to fly up and look for a man with a Houndour ok? [Pidove]Pidove!(Ok!) End Chapter 3. Like always,I'll update this in 2 days.And I hope you liked this chapter! |
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Good chapter, I am surprised that I forgot to favorite this. I will do that right now.
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Sorry for the late update.We'll just get it over with. Characters Alex Oshawott Pidove Rebecca Snivy Houndour Mityana Chapter 4.Double Trouble [Alex]Where is Pidove? [Rebecca]He left 10 minutes ago.Where can he be? [Oshawott]Osha!(Whats that?) [Alex]Shhh!Do you hear that? [Everybody]......... .... .. ... [Pidove]PIDOVE!!!(HELP ME!!!) *zooms to Alex* [Alex]Pidove?What happened?Did you see him? [Pidove]Pi pidove!(Yeah but...) [Alex]But what? *fire blasts and almost hits them* [???]Bow wow!(dang it!) [???]Arf arf!(work on your aim,goofball!) [Alex]Who's there? [???]Bow bow wow!(oh no one but...) [Houndour]Bow wow!(houndour!) [Mityana]Arf arf!(and Mityana!) [Rebecca]Lets get them! [Pidove]Pi dove!(forget it!I'm outta here!) Foe Houndour ( lvl 24 HP 124/124) and Mityana ( lvl 26 HP 140/140) appeared! Alex sent out Oshawott (lvl 12 HP 94/94) Rebecca sent out Snivy (lvl 13 HP 100) Battle start Foe Houndour used Fire Blast on Snivy!Its super effective! 106 damage!Snivy fainted. Foe Mityana used Bite on Oshawott! 104 damage!Oshawott fainted. Battle End End of Chapter. Once again sorry for the late update.Lots of things are happening.Hope you enjoyed anyway! Characters Alex Oshawott Pidove Rebecca Snivy Houndour Mityana Chapter 4.Double Trouble [Alex]Where is Pidove? [Rebecca]He left 10 minutes ago.Where can he be? [Oshawott]Osha!(Whats that?) [Alex]Shhh!Do you hear that? [Everybody]......... .... .. ... [Pidove]PIDOVE!!!(HELP ME!!!) *zooms to Alex* [Alex]Pidove?What happened?Did you see him? [Pidove]Pi pidove!(Yeah but...) [Alex]But what? *fire blasts and almost hits them* [???]Bow wow!(dang it!) [???]Arf arf!(work on your aim,goofball!) [Alex]Who's there? [???]Bow bow wow!(oh no one but...) [Houndour]Bow wow!(houndour!) [Mityana]Arf arf!(and Mityana!) [Rebecca]Lets get them! [Pidove]Pi dove!(forget it!I'm outta here!) Foe Houndour ( lvl 24 HP 124/124) and Mityana ( lvl 26 HP 140/140) appeared! Alex sent out Oshawott (lvl 12 HP 94/94) Rebecca sent out Snivy (lvl 13 HP 100) Battle start Foe Houndour used Fire Blast on Snivy!Its super effective! 106 damage!Snivy fainted. Foe Mityana used Bite on Oshawott! 104 damage!Oshawott fainted. Battle End End of Chapter. Once again sorry for the late update.Lots of things are happening.Hope you enjoyed anyway! |
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Wow, Alex and Rebecca's pokemon get knocked out the very first turn!? Wow, talk about "ownage like a boss"! I wonder what Alex and Rebecca will find in the later chapters.
I noticed that after both Alex and Rebecca's pokemon faint, the battle ends right at that. In the pokemon games, it would look just like this: "Oshawott and Snivy have fainted. Alex and Reecca are out of useable pokemon. Alex and Rebecca blacked out..." I noticed another mistake, when you spelled mightyena, you spelled it like this: "mityana". The name of the pokemon really is "Mightyana". Other than that, it seemed to be another okay chapter. I noticed that after both Alex and Rebecca's pokemon faint, the battle ends right at that. In the pokemon games, it would look just like this: "Oshawott and Snivy have fainted. Alex and Reecca are out of useable pokemon. Alex and Rebecca blacked out..." I noticed another mistake, when you spelled mightyena, you spelled it like this: "mityana". The name of the pokemon really is "Mightyana". Other than that, it seemed to be another okay chapter. |
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Stevie 764:Well,we all make mistakes sometimes.And I wanted to make people be curious about what happens next. |
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Stevie 764
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Stevie 764:Yeah,I wouldn't like that either.Thanks. Anyway,after about 2 months,I will finally update this.So sorry for the long wait. Characters Alex Rebecca Weird Pokemon Chapter 5.A mysterious encounter. *After the battle,Alex and Rebecca ran to the nearest Pokemon Center* [Alex] Man,we got owned. [Rebecca] Well we didn't prepare.If we did,We would own THEM! [Alex] Well in case they show up again,lets do some battles. [Rebecca] Ok. *After about 2 hours of battles,each got their Pokemon leveled up to 50* [Alex] That was 2 hours of my life I won't forget. [Rebecca] I didn't realize what time it was. [Alex] Well,It was still cool fights. [Rebecca] Yeah,maybe now we should-- *Something black grabs and drags Rebecca into a cage* [Rebecca] WHAT THE?!?!? [Alex] What happened? [???] MUHA HA HA HA! [Alex] Who are you? [???] I will not tell you my identity,but I will tell you I am a Pokemon. [Weird Pokemon] I am taking you friend for my own needs. [Alex] Not if I can help it! Battle start Mysterious Pokemon appeared.(lvl 100 HP 543/543 Alex sent out Oshawott!(lvl 50 HP 243/243) Mysterious Pokemon used Ultra Shadow Kill! Critical hit!Oshawott took 479 damage! Oshawott faints. Battle End. [Weird Pokemon] Now if you excuse me,I'll be on my way. [Alex]Rebecca! End Chapter 5. I bet that was a twist you didn't see coming.I wanted to make it interesting.Thanks for reading! Anyway,after about 2 months,I will finally update this.So sorry for the long wait. Characters Alex Rebecca Weird Pokemon Chapter 5.A mysterious encounter. *After the battle,Alex and Rebecca ran to the nearest Pokemon Center* [Alex] Man,we got owned. [Rebecca] Well we didn't prepare.If we did,We would own THEM! [Alex] Well in case they show up again,lets do some battles. [Rebecca] Ok. *After about 2 hours of battles,each got their Pokemon leveled up to 50* [Alex] That was 2 hours of my life I won't forget. [Rebecca] I didn't realize what time it was. [Alex] Well,It was still cool fights. [Rebecca] Yeah,maybe now we should-- *Something black grabs and drags Rebecca into a cage* [Rebecca] WHAT THE?!?!? [Alex] What happened? [???] MUHA HA HA HA! [Alex] Who are you? [???] I will not tell you my identity,but I will tell you I am a Pokemon. [Weird Pokemon] I am taking you friend for my own needs. [Alex] Not if I can help it! Battle start Mysterious Pokemon appeared.(lvl 100 HP 543/543 Alex sent out Oshawott!(lvl 50 HP 243/243) Mysterious Pokemon used Ultra Shadow Kill! Critical hit!Oshawott took 479 damage! Oshawott faints. Battle End. [Weird Pokemon] Now if you excuse me,I'll be on my way. [Alex]Rebecca! End Chapter 5. I bet that was a twist you didn't see coming.I wanted to make it interesting.Thanks for reading! |
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07-26-12 07:14 PM
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Giegas : That completly reminded me of when I did the secret pokemon and revealed it as Mewtwo.  I might be the only one to post here so you could continue your chapters.
I almost forgot. In my Life Of Tetris story, I am working on chapter 4e, and it will be a long and hopefully great one that might be better than my first chapter in the story. I will smmon you there once I finish the part. I might be the only one to post here so you could continue your chapters.
I almost forgot. In my Life Of Tetris story, I am working on chapter 4e, and it will be a long and hopefully great one that might be better than my first chapter in the story. I will smmon you there once I finish the part. |
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