OK, here's a story I've been working on for a while. To start off I will introduce the characters. The characters are:

Jiminy Muffet, a 13 year old boy living in London with his two other brothers.

Edward Muffet, a stubborn 16 year old boy who constantly complains and is somewhat deranged.

Billy Muffet, an imaginative, incredibly intelligent 6 year old. He is the brain of the trio and has an IQ of 1,000.

The Count of Drakes, a vulture-like alien from a planet called Nebular in Andromeda galaxy, he has come to Earth to enlist someone's help in saving his people. This help is the three aforementioned boys.

The Crimson King, an evil, Satanic entity that created a whole new evil-centered universe called "Crimson Paradise". He is now trying to expand the empire into our universe, starting off with Nebular. He must be stopped at all costs!

Anyway, here goes chapter 1. Hope you all enjoy it....

CHAPTER 1: The Creature
Jiminy, Edward and Billy were out fishing in their homeland of Arkansastucky Redwhiteblueland. Edward was getting impatient, for he had not caught any fish in the past hour. "Why won't these freakin fish bite?!?!?!" he yelled. "Hey, I dunno". Jiminy said, slightly grinning. "I guess they're just sleeping or something. Hey Billy, do fish sleep?" Billy replied, sneering, with "Of course they do. All living things must sleep you know. Fish don't close their eyes though, because they don't have eyelids." Edward groaned, more annoyed at Billy's high-uppity goody goody self than usual. He was in a bad mood today. He wanted something EXCITING to happen. Something cool and mind-blowing awesome to happen, something that could change his life forever. Little did Edward know that something very adventurous COULD and WOULD happen to him and his brothers, and it would happen right...about....NOW! The boys suddenly saw a glowing object in the sky. "What the hell's that? A UFO?" Edward asked. "I have no idea" Jiminy replied, slightly afraid. The glowing object landed right next to Billy, scaring the living lugnuts out of him. "HOLY S..........." he stopped, and saw a purple tentacle come out of the UFO. All of the boys were horrified. Jiminy tried to run but couldn't. A head then popped out. GASP! (they all gasped) The head then spoke to them in a high-pitched British sounding accent. "Hello there". The boys were surprised that an alien actually knew English. Edward was the first to reply, with a shaky "Hello....?" Seeing that the boys would not harm it, the creature happily jumped out of his spacecraft and gallantly announced "Greetings! I am the Count of Drakes from planet Nebular! So very pleased to meet you I am, I really, truly am! I'm just glad you little ragamuffins didn't harm me in any way shape or form!" Edward suppressed a laugh. This creature was a total moron, he thought. "Listen, I need some help.....there's this guy, the Crimson King, big fat god dude with a red cloak, a red Grim Reaper sorta dude! Well, this dude has created some alternate universe, yet it is an evil one! Much more evil than any other galaxy! It is called Crimson Paradise, named after himself, The Crimson King. He must be stopped! Help me! I do not wish to become a killer or a lyncher at all means!" he said hastily. The boys thought for a minute, then finally replied, "Well, OK, we'll help you stop this Crimson King dude or whatever the hell his name is". "Oh goody!", the Count replied, "Oh goody goody gumdrops! Thank you laddies! Let's go to my UFO and we'll be on our way!" "Um, but Jiminy...." Edward started. "What?" "What if mom and dad notice we're gone?" "They won't. We'll just be gone for a little while, fighting off this imaginary crimson king dude. It'll take 20 minutes, tops." Little did they know that the Crimson King was no imaginary creature, he was REAL, and he was expecting them.....waiting......

*fade out*

You are a creative bugger my friend. I can't wait for chapter 2. I will be following this story, it has the Jake Kostik stamp of approval.

legacyme3 : Haha, thanks man I'm probably gonna post chapter 2 either Friday or Saturday, because I probably can't tomorrow considering it's Thanksgiving.

It's all good, just make sure when it's done you put it all together so we can enjoy it in one mini novel. =D It would be a nice achievement.

Eh, perhaps I'll just post the second chapter tonight.

CHAPTER 2: Onto The Not-So-Thriving Planet of Nebular

The boys were flying in the UFO for about 2 hours before they reached the Count's planet, even at the speed of light, a speed this UFO could obtain. Although his UFO was very cool. It was shaped like a yellow submarine, it had 50 foot long flat-screen TVs, a naked alien sculpture which disturbed Jiminy greatly, a bunch of weird exotic food, and over 9000 boxes of sweet potato pops, which the boys indulged in for most of the trip. "It's not often ALIENS come to our planet, you know" the Count said "In fact, we haven't had a non-native here since 5670 B.C. when Julius Vendergloobenschmertzenhobberenthegreatderpickleschneeze III came from Uranus to defend our planet from Morlokians, he's our local hero you know, blah blah blah blah....." the boys weren't listening. They were watching some gymnastics show starring a huge pink blob dude who was supposedly named "Arsenio". It creeped Jiminy out, scared Billy and annoyed Edward so they decided to stop watching the weird Nebularian TV shows. Finally they arrived. The planet was yellow with a red stripe across it, it looked the size of 50 Jupiters combined also. The Count crashed the spaceship onto an apartment looking building and the boys & count got out. The count suddenly gasped. This wasn't the homeland he loved and inhabited before. Almost everything was destroyed (the only surviving object was the apartment the Count just crushed) and everyone seemed to be panicking and going to underground homes. The Count asked one of them what was wrong and he replied "THE CRIMSON KING NUKED US! HE NUKED DRAKES! OUR MOST THRIVING AND POPULOUS CITY! AUUGH! HELP US! OH GOD! HELP! HELP! HELP! AAAAAAAAHHH!" The Count looked horrified. Billy later pointed out that he wasn't upset because his home city was nuked, but instead because the Count had nothing to be count of anymore. Suddenly a dark, glowing, red object landed right next to Billy, again scaring the lugnuts and electrons out of him. The Crimson King then shouted grimly "I'M HERE!"

TO BE CONTINUED

Wow dude that an interesting story so I like how adventurous it is And the boys are really funny it kinda reminds me of the movie ''Flight of the Navigator'' its an old movie.

P.S. this is the best story I read on vizzed by members before good job man