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I was just trying to go down the nice ol' road, when I saw flashing lights behind me and a siren. "What? I sure hope that isn't for me." I said with hope. I pulled over to the side of the roa to let the cop cars flow out from behind me, but they didn't. Suddenly, a giant jolt came from the back of the truck. The truck shook and there was a broken part at the end. "What was that?" I tried to act calm but there was a sharp edge in my voice. "Uh..... I really don't know." Razor replied, looking concerned. That was when I looked back and saw Singelli in the back of the truck where the sharp metal had caved in. She was motionless. Oh gosh, that wasn't good. "Could someone check Singelli while I go see what happened?" I asked. It came out as a question, but it was a command. "Sure dude." Mohammed replied. Yet again in that really mellow town. he must think nothing was wrong. As I exited the truck, I saw a tiny "Smart" car had smashed into the back of the truck. A police cruiser was parked behind it with the Police Office already out of his car with his gun pointed at me. "Hold your hands high." He screamed. I could see the fear in his eyes and it disgusted me to know that this man was a Police Officer. "What you got me for?" I said it with a sarcastic tone, which didn't help my case. "W-What do you think?" He yelled at me. He was still about 50 feet back. "Razor!" I shouted, "Get out here." At the sound of the name Razor, the officer put his finger on the trigger. As Razor stepped out of the vehicle, he started to relax. He even gave a little chuckle at the sight of him. "Don't you laugh? I sneered. At that, he got ready to shoot again. "Don't be fooled by his size." Razor was a 5'4", skinny kid, but here could pack a punch. But compared to me, the 6'2" mid size 'kid', he looked like a tinny 10 year old. The guy was scared, I am glad mohammed didn't come out. He was about 5'8" and mid size, but he would start trying to do meditation and the police would arrest him for being drunk. The guy was so focused onus he didn't see the other guy in the smart car crawl out of his car with a gun. Now this guy on the other hand was perfectly drunk. His eyes were bloodshot and he was fumbling around. Thank god that guy is alive, if he wasn't I would have to be in court for murder. That is how stupid this part of town is. "Do even see that guy?" I asked thew officer pointing at the guy who looked like a rich robber. "Who?" The police turned around, and he seemed to be surprised to see him in the shape he was. "Oh, you guys go along." I was stunned. He just saw the guys and let us go? "I need my truck fixed." I said. "I can't drive this thing!" "Deal with it." The officer replied. He was just another one of the nice people! 'Give us the money to fix it." Razor took a step forward. The officer stepped back, got his wallet, and gave us everything. We took the cash and credit card out and through the rest at him. "Have a nice day." I said. Quite pleased. It was just then when I looked at the back of the truck to see all of the damage there really was, it was a lot. The repairs would probably max out the Officers Card. I went back in the truck to the back to see how Singelli was. "How is she?" I asked. "Cool dude." Mohammed replied. "No, not you. Gags? How is she?" "Well, I am not a docter, but I would say not that well." tgags answered. I went back to look at her, and it did look bad. "Is she breathing?' I asked,worried. "Yeah, but not very well. tgags answered, "Look at her arm, I don't think it should bend that way." Sure enough, her arm was bent backward, with one of the bones sticking out. Blood was slowly draining out of her arm onto the already blood stained rug. "Turn her up and bandage the 'opening' so that no more blood comes out." I just casually said it, but it sounded like an order. Sure enough, gags and goodboy bandaged the wound and sat her upright in a chair.I was wondering were Eniitan was. Then I knew. I walked out to the front of the truck where I knew she would be. "Are you Ok?" I asked here with deep concern. "I.....I really don't know." She replied, I could tell that she was nervous. "Why don't you come on in the truck adn we will get going?" I was trying to make her feel better. "Is....is Singelli Ok?" She was really worried about here friend. "Lets.... jsut not talk about that for now,OK?" I didn't want to make her upset. "OK." We walked around the car to the front seats, goodboy was sitting shotgun. "Move." I told him. He didn't budge. "NOW." This time he did move. He went to sit in the back with gags and mohammed. I made sure to close the connecter between the fornt and back so Eiitan didn't have to see Singelli. We drove for about half an hour when I suddently heard gags and goodboy telling my Singelli could tell what happened. That was a fightning though, but I pulled the truck over and went back to the back to see what was going on. the good thing was that Singelli was back up and working, the bad thing was she wanted answers. 'What happened to me?" She asked. "Heh,heh." I didn't want to tell her. I though she would go into, yet another, rage. more on the first couple later. "A car just drove into the back of the truck and almost killed you. Duh." Thanks mohammed, just tell it how it is. Geez. I shot him a look that said, you won't be getting any of MY Muffins. Weird, but he really loves muffins. "Hm, that should explain it." She said in wonder. "Is this all my blood on the rug?" 'Yeah." Mohammed replied. "Carry on then." It seemed as if she didn't care. Thats Singelli for ya'. I went back up to the front to see Eniitan in shock. "That is what all that was?' She asked me. "Um, yeah." I didn't want to go into detail. She said nothing. When I first saw it, I was disgusted, I could barely come to think of what she though of it. We kept driving, which was quite boring. The music kept flashing on and off as the truck kept missing the signal because the thing that picked it up was one of the smashed parts of the truck. Now, I must say that the police here can't do anything right. I could see people with guns just walking around shooting people. I don't know what was happening. Was it a security zone? I didn't care until one of the bullets went though the passenger side window. It ripped through the window and though both Eniitan's seat and mine then it went out my window and hit someone else. That was enough to drive us over the top. I put my foot on the gas and stepped on it. I looked at how fast I was going, and it was unreal. I was going 157 miles per hour. Now, the signs on the side of the road said the speed limit was 70, but I was shot at so I didn't care. I saw some cops eating lunch on the side of the road, as I drove by they just waived.I couldn't take this anymore, I saw another high way going just off of this one, so I decided to take it. I thought it would be safer because I saw that it was packed. I was guessing a lot more people were going to be there, meaning better security. As soon as I got onto the road I saw which one it was. I was stunned. It was the same free way that our houses are next to. I knew that it was long, but I had no idea it was this long! "Woah. I can't believe we have gone back to the same road we started on." I exclaimed. "Is this really it?" Eniitan asked. 'Yep, and I am scared to see it." I said. See ya in part 3! Barathemos : Eniitan : Singelli : Sorry! Razor-987 : SuperCrash64 : mohammedroxx3 : tgags123 : goodboy : I was just trying to go down the nice ol' road, when I saw flashing lights behind me and a siren. "What? I sure hope that isn't for me." I said with hope. I pulled over to the side of the roa to let the cop cars flow out from behind me, but they didn't. Suddenly, a giant jolt came from the back of the truck. The truck shook and there was a broken part at the end. "What was that?" I tried to act calm but there was a sharp edge in my voice. "Uh..... I really don't know." Razor replied, looking concerned. That was when I looked back and saw Singelli in the back of the truck where the sharp metal had caved in. She was motionless. Oh gosh, that wasn't good. "Could someone check Singelli while I go see what happened?" I asked. It came out as a question, but it was a command. "Sure dude." Mohammed replied. Yet again in that really mellow town. he must think nothing was wrong. As I exited the truck, I saw a tiny "Smart" car had smashed into the back of the truck. A police cruiser was parked behind it with the Police Office already out of his car with his gun pointed at me. "Hold your hands high." He screamed. I could see the fear in his eyes and it disgusted me to know that this man was a Police Officer. "What you got me for?" I said it with a sarcastic tone, which didn't help my case. "W-What do you think?" He yelled at me. He was still about 50 feet back. "Razor!" I shouted, "Get out here." At the sound of the name Razor, the officer put his finger on the trigger. As Razor stepped out of the vehicle, he started to relax. He even gave a little chuckle at the sight of him. "Don't you laugh? I sneered. At that, he got ready to shoot again. "Don't be fooled by his size." Razor was a 5'4", skinny kid, but here could pack a punch. But compared to me, the 6'2" mid size 'kid', he looked like a tinny 10 year old. The guy was scared, I am glad mohammed didn't come out. He was about 5'8" and mid size, but he would start trying to do meditation and the police would arrest him for being drunk. The guy was so focused onus he didn't see the other guy in the smart car crawl out of his car with a gun. Now this guy on the other hand was perfectly drunk. His eyes were bloodshot and he was fumbling around. Thank god that guy is alive, if he wasn't I would have to be in court for murder. That is how stupid this part of town is. "Do even see that guy?" I asked thew officer pointing at the guy who looked like a rich robber. "Who?" The police turned around, and he seemed to be surprised to see him in the shape he was. "Oh, you guys go along." I was stunned. He just saw the guys and let us go? "I need my truck fixed." I said. "I can't drive this thing!" "Deal with it." The officer replied. He was just another one of the nice people! 'Give us the money to fix it." Razor took a step forward. The officer stepped back, got his wallet, and gave us everything. We took the cash and credit card out and through the rest at him. "Have a nice day." I said. Quite pleased. It was just then when I looked at the back of the truck to see all of the damage there really was, it was a lot. The repairs would probably max out the Officers Card. I went back in the truck to the back to see how Singelli was. "How is she?" I asked. "Cool dude." Mohammed replied. "No, not you. Gags? How is she?" "Well, I am not a docter, but I would say not that well." tgags answered. I went back to look at her, and it did look bad. "Is she breathing?' I asked,worried. "Yeah, but not very well. tgags answered, "Look at her arm, I don't think it should bend that way." Sure enough, her arm was bent backward, with one of the bones sticking out. Blood was slowly draining out of her arm onto the already blood stained rug. "Turn her up and bandage the 'opening' so that no more blood comes out." I just casually said it, but it sounded like an order. Sure enough, gags and goodboy bandaged the wound and sat her upright in a chair.I was wondering were Eniitan was. Then I knew. I walked out to the front of the truck where I knew she would be. "Are you Ok?" I asked here with deep concern. "I.....I really don't know." She replied, I could tell that she was nervous. "Why don't you come on in the truck adn we will get going?" I was trying to make her feel better. "Is....is Singelli Ok?" She was really worried about here friend. "Lets.... jsut not talk about that for now,OK?" I didn't want to make her upset. "OK." We walked around the car to the front seats, goodboy was sitting shotgun. "Move." I told him. He didn't budge. "NOW." This time he did move. He went to sit in the back with gags and mohammed. I made sure to close the connecter between the fornt and back so Eiitan didn't have to see Singelli. We drove for about half an hour when I suddently heard gags and goodboy telling my Singelli could tell what happened. That was a fightning though, but I pulled the truck over and went back to the back to see what was going on. the good thing was that Singelli was back up and working, the bad thing was she wanted answers. 'What happened to me?" She asked. "Heh,heh." I didn't want to tell her. I though she would go into, yet another, rage. more on the first couple later. "A car just drove into the back of the truck and almost killed you. Duh." Thanks mohammed, just tell it how it is. Geez. I shot him a look that said, you won't be getting any of MY Muffins. Weird, but he really loves muffins. "Hm, that should explain it." She said in wonder. "Is this all my blood on the rug?" 'Yeah." Mohammed replied. "Carry on then." It seemed as if she didn't care. Thats Singelli for ya'. I went back up to the front to see Eniitan in shock. "That is what all that was?' She asked me. "Um, yeah." I didn't want to go into detail. She said nothing. When I first saw it, I was disgusted, I could barely come to think of what she though of it. We kept driving, which was quite boring. The music kept flashing on and off as the truck kept missing the signal because the thing that picked it up was one of the smashed parts of the truck. Now, I must say that the police here can't do anything right. I could see people with guns just walking around shooting people. I don't know what was happening. Was it a security zone? I didn't care until one of the bullets went though the passenger side window. It ripped through the window and though both Eniitan's seat and mine then it went out my window and hit someone else. That was enough to drive us over the top. I put my foot on the gas and stepped on it. I looked at how fast I was going, and it was unreal. I was going 157 miles per hour. Now, the signs on the side of the road said the speed limit was 70, but I was shot at so I didn't care. I saw some cops eating lunch on the side of the road, as I drove by they just waived.I couldn't take this anymore, I saw another high way going just off of this one, so I decided to take it. I thought it would be safer because I saw that it was packed. I was guessing a lot more people were going to be there, meaning better security. As soon as I got onto the road I saw which one it was. I was stunned. It was the same free way that our houses are next to. I knew that it was long, but I had no idea it was this long! "Woah. I can't believe we have gone back to the same road we started on." I exclaimed. "Is this really it?" Eniitan asked. 'Yep, and I am scared to see it." I said. See ya in part 3! Barathemos : Eniitan : Singelli : Sorry! Razor-987 : SuperCrash64 : mohammedroxx3 : tgags123 : goodboy : |
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I like how you describe me as a scrawny 10 year old wimp LOL, but in real life I am like 6 ft. Nice story by the way, i think it was even better than the first part. Are you trying to do this for yellow are red jersey? This is very creative and I cannot wait to read the next part of the story, I know it will be interesting and awesome! This looks much greater than 1,500 words personally, but nevertheless, great work man, this is really an awesome story and I cannot wait to read the next part of it! I already know it will be awesome! This looks much greater than 1,500 words personally, but nevertheless, great work man, this is really an awesome story and I cannot wait to read the next part of it! I already know it will be awesome! |
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Well done! I enjoyed this story bara you indeed know me very well. Please do some more I look forward to that. ^-^ |
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Still well written but... well... interesting. LOL I don't know how I feel about all the blood and gore. *sniffles* You trynna say something about me? hehe. Can't get it off your chest? I KID. I wasn't as fond of this one as the last one, but you do write well. Where is all the wailord meat?! And why all of a sudden did this story become about violence? lol Oh my. I KID. I wasn't as fond of this one as the last one, but you do write well. Where is all the wailord meat?! And why all of a sudden did this story become about violence? lol Oh my. |
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I like the story, to be honest, it's probably one of the better ones that I have read on this site. When I first saw the title, I was thinking "What kind of a story is this?" I like the story, to be honest, it's probably one of the better ones that I have read on this site. When I first saw the title, I was thinking "What kind of a story is this?" |
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